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crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30
Posts 345


0 posted 2010-06-22 09:54 PM



You
did that.
I can't breathe.
because of it.
you wanted to make
a strong, better person
the best that I could be, right?
well, I couldn't take it.
set me up to fail..
I give up. It'll
probably
break me
now.

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2010-06-23 10:11 AM


It will not break you, because you are aware of the risk, you can still resist. You are just perfect the way you are.

Very powerful poetic rendition.

Love,
M

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