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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-08-27 06:07 PM


‘tis just a gentle snapping sound
like a small branch underfoot
that halts the stride of one endowed
with a sense of urgency.

And in the pause pure silence falls
to weight the muscles with dismay
till unable to regain the will
nothing happens, zero, naught.

The pose is most undignified,
no directions left to read,
but who can read from left to right
when stuck in nothing happening?

That moment stretches into years
until brain functions re-engage
and rev towards awakening
a too long dormant will.

Oh, will, the will of mighty men
breaks the silence, moves the feet,
but of that snapping, snapping, sound
it lurks unseen in spaces weak.

‘tis just a weak space, nothing more,
and sounds don’t really hurt at all
so crush those branches happily
on the way towards a happening!

Helen / 27 August 2010


© Copyright 2010 Helen - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2010-08-27 07:00 PM


I love your first verse, it set the tone and made for a great poem.

Nice way to make things happen!

Always a good read from you, Helen~

katahdin
Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
2 posted 2010-08-28 12:19 PM


Enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

easy1
Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
3 posted 2010-08-28 12:29 PM


Ah, deers and bears... I cannot help but smile broadly at your poem here, it is well-nigh perfectly written.
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
4 posted 2010-08-28 05:43 AM


Dear Helen, your poetic reflections never ever fail to impress! This is another precious write.

Love,
Margherita

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
5 posted 2010-08-28 06:26 AM


Thank you so much, dear poet friends!  I really do appreciate your kind comments - and Margherita, my fingers do the "writing" and then I reflect on what I've written.  A bit back to front if you ask me.  

Helen

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
6 posted 2010-08-28 12:05 PM


You do amaze the reader.
You are a poet's poet.

JL


Andrew Scott
Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
7 posted 2010-08-28 08:41 PM


I could feel this one as I was reading it. It's the bear in me. As such, that snapping usually means lunch!

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
8 posted 2010-08-28 08:50 PM


Hi, there Bunches of Honey!

Another creative offering of poetic thoughts from the pen of the illustrious Helen!

"‘tis just a weak space, nothing more,
and sounds don’t really hurt at all
so crush those branches happily
on the way towards a happening!"

Warm hug and smiles from across the miles,

Linda

Amaryllis
Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
9 posted 2010-08-29 03:13 AM


This is an uplifting read! I adore the title, and the use of `snapping`... anywhere in the poem; it`s wonderful, auditory.  (except that it reminds me of when my son`s clavicle broke during birth... built like a linebacker, that one.)  
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But this poem is wonderful!  
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Best~Amaryllis

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