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Bastet
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since 2010-05-07
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0 posted 2010-06-20 04:32 AM



Men, you’ve craved the earth
too long, let the moon be pure
as a child, let her light
cream the clouds, let her pour milk
on ponds, lakes and streams, let her first
quarter comma punctuate

each paragraph of stars
let her flare white fireworks
through winter’s scaffold
of bare branches, twinkle amidst spring’s
first lace-leaf embroidery

when she’s extinguished
by a cloud, let wind applaud
loudly for an encore
though old earth is fraying at
the edges, let moon remain

a maiden untouched
by man --- waxing and waning---
mistress of the tides
draping the sea in bridal
white designer of the night


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Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
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1 posted 2010-06-20 02:15 PM


Ohh I love this.. each line is perfect.. I always know I`m in for a treat when I click on your name! Wonderful write, Bastet  
~Amaryllis

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
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2 posted 2010-06-20 09:50 PM



a maiden untouched
by man --- waxing and waning---
mistress of the tides
draping the sea in bridal
white designer of the night

Magic words, you wrote it well.

Lindsay

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
3 posted 2010-06-21 12:37 PM


A freaking excellent poem - so excellent that I have to suggest "bridal draperies of the night" as a possible alternative. At no extra charge, of course.

And the sentiment is not only good but needed, considering how some hucksters have lately been "selling real estate on the Moon" - ugh.  

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