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Open Poetry #46

What do you see?

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

0 posted 2010-06-19 01:15 AM

They see a kid, sane person.
a bit average maybe,
clearly fitting in,
blending with the crowd.
The tears of laughter,
a well-placed grin,
and living for the future.

They miss faltering smiles,
the constant burn of pain,
and tears of despair.
The thin wall of lies
breaking, crumbling
the small existence:
here today, gone tomorrow.

What do you see?

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2010-06-19 04:53 AM

I very loved it, the subjectivity of the look, of the world is perfectly describes, I can ffel the confusion, the apparence between the outside and the inside, there is a masterpiece in your work....Thank you very much for the clarity of sentiments here

have a nice day

yann

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

2 posted 2010-06-19 07:28 AM

I see a lonely kid, a budding artist, someone in need of a good significant other to share life's load with: in other words, a basically decent, unique, and potentially very powerful human being.

I like the poem - it made me think about such things for a time again.

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