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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Pale clouds fall to earth today caress sodden rooftops drift like shades along black pine branches and find their quiet way onto my skin. Sashes of white ethereal, light, like nothingness wrap about shoulders, hips, ankles then rip apart soft silent to twine their moist fingers around a green boxwood or a coral peony, annointing all with holy drops that cling like small swarovokis then connect, to form a trailing bead that wends it`s winding way to complete a crystal pilgrimage to the waiting soil. On my face and arms, each tiny hair holds an opal gem, worshipped by this glinting mist in a moistened muffled morning, half-submerged in drifting wet. Water, water welcome on my lashes, on my lips, dilute the dessicated day, drip dripping from each dampened hour, I am Naiad in my element, wavering through my teal-drenched palace halls, most flowing graceful daughter of Asopos, I inhale the essence of the sea. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is so very refreshing!! What a glorious write! A real pleasure to read, Amaryllis~ |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Blues!!  Best~Amaryllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
can see the salty residue in this...but you driving an element? (sorry...images ya know) |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lol Dark! =D love it |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
what a scenic landscape of emotion~~much enjoyed ~*~ |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
An excellent fog poem, although I did have to Google "Swarovski"... Very sanuous, or is that sensual? You almost make me miss the foggy days (the curling mists and droplets upon the hairs), of which there are relatively few down this way, as I have found. |
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VelvetVampress Junior Member
since 2010-04-24
Posts 26 |
Thank you for the share it is an awsome write. i never was able to be in fog that thick. but this was detailed enough to make me feel it. awsome job ~Velvet Vampress~ |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
Absolutely love your style! Can't get enough of it. Little gems like: "coral peony," small swarovokis," "teal-drenched palace walls," what treasure chest do they come out of? I want to go there too. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Amaryllis, this was soo sensational. What a wonderful way you have about you! Your words dripped honey mist onto the lips of my eyes... Beautiful! Richard xx |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you thank you, Bel1e, easy1, Velvet, Bastet and Richy! So glad this poem does what I`d hoped.. oh I do love the fog!  Best~Amaryllis |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
Exquisitely done, I could feel the fog around my arms. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I can feel this so totally, I immerse in your words and feel one with the elements. Fantastic job, dear Amaryllis. Love, Margherita |
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How I wish I could write like this... Absolutely beautiful, miss. You took such a simple moment in time and turned it into a beautiful production. I could feel it.... |
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