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Namyh
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0 posted 2010-06-16 07:24 PM


The Giggle

In the misty, murky mire of a mangled, marshy mud
rose a Moon betwixt the shadows 'neath a starry night above.
No bird beat wings. No mouse did squeak. Not even an owl's hoot
did pierce the stillness clinging to the trees and plants and roots.

I stomped upon the cigarette. The embers fumed and fizzled.
As I turned to go back inside, I swore I heard a giggle;
not large but small, not big but tiny, not huge but very wee
behind the house, down by the marsh's solitary tree.

I stepped on leaves. I sloshed thru grass. I parted a bush with fear
and beheld a sight, not often seen, uncommonly vivid and rare.
A tiny stadium filled with bugs, some odd, some known by name
were giggling, cheering in tiny voices at an Insect Baseball game!

Miniature floodlights lit the diamond. A roach hit a highball fly.
A beetle with cap and glove caught it. The audience roared and sighed.
I couldn't believe it ! My mind was blown ! Legs and feet went limp
as mosquito vendors shouted "Get your hotdogs, burgers and shrimp !"

Mesmerized, my face went slack. The muscles cramped my jaw.
Only a spectacle like this comes once to remember forevermore.
I moved and something snapped or cracked, a limb, a twig, a branch.
All bugs did turn their eyes on me. Their glare....an avalanche!

They scattered in an instant, even turned off all the lights
and plunged the field in darkness making shadows of the night.
The beating wings, the mouse's squeak, the owl's nightly hoot
now pierced the calm to chase the bugs in hungry, hot pursuit.
And the tiny voices faded 'neath a starry night above
in the misty, murky mire of a mangled, marshy mud.

Namyh

[This message has been edited by Namyh (06-18-2010 04:53 PM).]

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easy1
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1 posted 2010-06-17 02:58 AM


Just a little itty bitty tiny bit of work to go and you have got a real Samuel Clemens or Midnight Hollow vibe going there, or something like that. I can see an "alternative press" tie-in with the smokeables, too, if desired.

It's a good write as is, of course. Made me smile.

Earl Brinkman
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2 posted 2010-06-17 03:11 AM


Your imagination really took me to another world - albeit a small one.  I had a wonderful time.
LindsayP
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3 posted 2010-06-17 10:03 PM



In the misty, murky mire of a mangled, marshy mud
rose a Moon betwixt the shadows 'neath a starry night above.
No bird beat wings. No mouse did squeak. Not even an owl's hoot
did pierce the stillness clinging to the trees and plants and roots.

Yes you wrote it very well Amaryllis, I loved those first two lines the best

but it was quite clever how you put it all together. A delight to read.

Lindsay

LindsayP
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4 posted 2010-06-17 10:08 PM



Sorry Amaryllis I should have put Namyh's name in my comment.

Lindsay

Namyh
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5 posted 2010-06-17 11:41 PM


easy1 – No poet of worth could ask for more than to be honored in the ranks of Samuel Clemens or Midnight Hollow vibes. That first line rattled around in my head like a marble for days, which gives a pretty good indication of how much space was available. But since this made you smile, then I’m honored to be its author. And I’ll bet Samuel Clemens is smiling with a big giggle for you and me. Thanks easy1 for your wonderful words. Namyh
Namyh
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6 posted 2010-06-17 11:43 PM


Earl – Stardate 241833 – We have just left the Gamma system and picked up a Federation passenger, Earl Brinkman, who by way of imagination was transported from another world, albeit a small one, with fascinating stories of insect baseball games. I want to thank the crew for listening and providing him with a wonderful time with the hope he will ride our Starship once again to places where no Earl has gone before. Ahead Warp 7. Captain Namyh out.
Namyh
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7 posted 2010-06-17 11:45 PM


LindsayP – I wrote this on a Tuesday, the only day on which I’m clever. But since you loved the first two lines best and found this a delight to read, I’m now dedicated to strive for cleverness the other six days. If I make it, I’ll rest on the seventh from creating and that’ll be a miracle. Thanks LindsayP for stopping in with your words of enjoyment. And thank you Amaryllis wherever you may be. LOL. Namyh  
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