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Circles and Polygons
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Circles and Polygons |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Circles and Polygons Smugly, let me take the credit For helping you to find your center I took your square and altered it I trimmed it a bit and cut off its corners I rounded it into a circle And painted a dot in its middle The dot is its essence, its pinnacle And now, allow me to launch the first strike And aim for the center For if there be a circle There must be a special center But You saw me aiming for the center of your circle You were trying not to let me in you You saw me sneaking in the middle of your middle You were trying not to let me in you Smugly, you presume to take credit For helping me to find my center You took my circle and altered it You pinched it a bit and bent its corners You pounded it into a polygon And scratched an X across its bosom The X is its essence, a paragon So now, prepare to fire at me if you dare And aim for the center For if there be a polygon There must be a special center But I saw you aiming at the center of me with no care I was trying not to let you in me I saw you raking me like you did not care I was trying not to let you in me |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
oh my~ loving the patterns in this~ |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
I can almost see the hands pinching and squeezing the shapes from one to another. Excellent imagery |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wonderful.. loving the quasi-cconcrete form (which works well with the geometric device).. I do enjoy the refrain, but my fave is in S1, L2-4.. great visual! Excellent work here.. thanks for sharing. ~Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome format and theme! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I had to read it twice Earl before I gave it a plus, but you have put a lot of thought into this intrigueing post. well done. Lindsay |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Thanks for the feedback. Just from reading a bit of the posts on this forum I realized that this form of poetry has a following. So I submitted this poem. But to be honest I prefer a traditional style so I will probably go back to being my usual self. Whoever he may be! |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Ah, the pinnacle and the paragon (although I did chuckle a bit upon looking up Webster's definition of the latter). Cleverly written and an enjoyable read. |
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