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What Passion Is
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What Passion Is |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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It`s so over-rated no metaphor needed so over sung over praised over dreamed seething in psyches steam of the ego only a transient physical thing five seconds of pleasure a cell-fired instinct not to be placed on a level with awe love, trust, companion respect, safety, comfort forgiveness and kindness and patience and law I am so over the throbbing the sobbing i know that I sound like a wrinkled up prune But when you`ve seen mankind all running in circles chasing the same tired hormonal tune no vanity graces or value it places upon its recipient past that small fire, Oh leave to the youth now discover the `magic` each generation thinks they go higher- wait till the sunset whenever it takes you sit by a death bed or surgery`s crib- let husband hold you when the tears shake you throbbing and sobbing that baby may live, oh then it`s not rated now is it? so passive un-sung how this passion can burn for a life- so much past a moment beyond the small pleasures un-sung, under-stated this passionate wife. |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
I felt the desperation in this... and I loved all your analogies having to do with "passion"... awesome. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Slowly.. yes, this was born out of the anguish of sitting with my baby back when he was 2, 3, 5, etc.. in the children`s hospital, he has had many painful surgeries..going through that crucible of pain has changed me so much.. thanks for your reply  ~Amaryllis |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is incredible. I felt your anguish - and I was so caught up in flow of your words. It was like reading a river. Know what I mean? Love it. A |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Oh thank you, Alison.. yes, the poem did just sorta flooow on out.. . Thanks for reading me  . ~Amaryllis ps: I really did just finish a bowl of lumpy oatmeal..ick lol |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Best wishes. Seems to me the poem started out anti-sexuality and then transitioned into the children's hospital room and the crying & hugging, etc. Interesting write. Abuse of power |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Easy1.. Yes I meant for the poem to juxtapose the over-sensationalism of sex with what really matters.. not that I`m against lovin` with me hubs! lol Just.. when you go through things like that, it kinda puts it all into perspective.. if you know what I mean.. also I`m thinking this poem would have been better without the rhyme, which lends it a lighter feel than I intended, kind of a Dr. Seuss tone, lol! Nothing against the great Mr. Geisel, of course.. it just maybe wasn`t the right vehicle for this subject..? But thanks for reading! ~Amaryllis |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Amaryllis, You have passion pretty well pegged. It has its ups and its downs. Love Bobby |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Amaryllis, The first half of your poem represents about 99 percent of my writing perfectly. I know you didn't mean anything personal, but my scrbbles must sound like a broken record at times. I guess that's what happens when all you write about (me) is your vision of that perfect person, with all the passion, and true and meaningful substance, that comes along with it? I loved your poem, as always. You are very lucky to have what you have. Maybe someday I'll have that too? Hold on to that with everything you've got. I am sooo happy for you Richard xx |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Bobby! . .And thank you, Richard.. you know I surely didn`t mean to take away from the value of passionate (romantic) poetry.. it certainly has it`s place, it is one of mankind`s greatest joys! I used to be more swanny.. but what we`ve endured has.. changed me. I used to think it `wrecked` me, but not anymore.. such strength has come from it. I have a much greater tolerance for anyone with disability or deformity (my youngest was born with a very rare facial defect).. and my other children are learning that same tolerance. . Someday when I am ready I will post a poem I wrote about the white-hot anguish a parent feels at their child`s hospital bedside.. it is so intensly personal (to me) and rather raw.. but I think it is a necessary message, at times. . Well thank you for being you, my friend! And yes.. carry on! . All best~Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
touching |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I liken passion to oxygen. One doesn't care about it, unless you aren't getting any. Sorry about your child. I really know this feeling, for my youngest has had her health issues as well. Good luck Amaryllis, and I hope everything turns out ok. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lol, CG~! Great tidbit.. yes, easy for me to write this poem when I`m getting all the `o2` I need, hey!!  lol. Thanks for your concern & kind words.. hope your gal is happy & healthy as well. All best~Amaryllis |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~This is very well written....I also felt the desperation in this...and the sobering reality of it all~ niiice~ |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Realize that life can be unfair and feel some desperation too, thanks for sharing and wish you the best. regards yann |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A deeply poignant poem that touches the heart strings, my prayers are with you my friend, good luck. Lindsay |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Amaryllis - passion written from deep within in these words. Great write... BC |
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