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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you wore that opportunity suggestively like some short black skirt that didn't cover much of anything except the moments before I wanted to you said it was not breaking and entering since you left things so open ended with your hands behind your back too pretending my glances were handcuffs and then that typical smile side detour leaving little signs along your shoulders like a hint of perfume that lingered where a freckle had already taken my eyes and my mind was way ahead of your predictions at least you let me think so eventually when you stopped too suddenly to slow me and had to live with the outcome of our collision which you did with almost lady like pretensions ___________ daark |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
*Only 28 re-readings to go till I get it...  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms amary..imagine the purchased political status of certain female california politicians and their seduction of the middle winged voters..not that that has anything to do with the poem..thanks ms |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank`ee!  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
You know I adore the way you write! Be cool, Mr. Daark..& keep writing ~A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms amary..mujumbled thanks ms |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
You have a talent for the line. I liked how you wrapped this up with that last one. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks james... _____________ thank you earl |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
when you stopped too suddenly to slow me and had to live with the outcome of our collision Guess that's what happens when you tail-gate on the 101... or at Cook's Corner on a Saturday night. Enjoyed the view, D. Indigo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms indigo... could do cooks with you...if you were soft spoken...thanks lady |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~this made me smile~ ~well met, Darkie~*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
dark daughter...thanks for your eye smile |
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