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Amaryllis
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0 posted 2010-06-06 10:33 PM



Was it in some tome,
some dust-loved anthology
from your violet youth,
swollen with time and elegant ideas;
was it then it hit you?
Like a wash of
citron incandescence,
flowering fertile
in your novice sense,
vital as conception.
Was it then you gathered
to your core
like a hungry singularity:
the sparrows`s spin,
the heather`s feathering-
the  moon like stone?
How love and loss
are only grand abstractions,
how bone and sinew
knit, how tongues
can drum,
blooming in the spirit,
an algae on the water,
not ugly, no-
but permeating..
and you have since to
be the same-
was it then?

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.PS: all.. I am sorry if I have been over-posting. I don`t mean to make others sick of me here on the boards. I will take some time off.. thanks everyone  :)

[This message has been edited by Amaryllis (06-07-2010 09:06 AM).]

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1slick_lady
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1 posted 2010-06-06 10:53 PM


of course it was
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2 posted 2010-06-06 11:01 PM


Oh my!
quote:
Was it then you gathered
to your core
like a hungry singularity:
the sparrows`s spin,
the heather`s feathering-
the  moon like stone?


As Helen said, "Of course it was."

easy1
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3 posted 2010-06-07 06:12 AM


Very nice... not only for the skilled wording and theme of discovery (specifically of the joy of poetry, which should fare well with this crowd), but also for your valiant attempt to describe the actual awakening into rational, filtering consciousness of a new idea. That's a high bar, and I think you cleared it. If not, at least the citron scent will clear out something.

The question: for me, hmmm, probably a mobile above the crib, one of my earliest accessible memories. Beauty and spatial relations, and once one learns to read and write with words the compositions flow from that earlier splendor, as much as is humanly possible.

Had to slow down and read this poem over; it's a good read, thanks.


Margherita
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4 posted 2010-06-07 09:05 AM


quote:
Was it then you gathered
to your core
like a hungry singularity:



It was most certainly a magical moment and it blooms permanently now.

Love this, dear Amaryllis. Your poetic voice rings with excellence.

Love,
Margherita

Richy
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5 posted 2010-06-07 11:37 AM




My love for poetry, initially came when I first read a poem, almost as beautiful as this one.

I think I just fell in love with it, all over again.
Richard xx


Sunshine
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6 posted 2010-06-07 11:43 AM


It was books in general that drew me in;
but then when someone spoke alliteratively,
and fluid sounds were flung from a tongue
that wrapped its way delicious over and
around vowels that voiced fluid silver...
that was when it was...and it was a long,
long time ago...


Amaryllis
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7 posted 2010-06-07 11:52 AM


Many thanks, everyone-!
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I understand the poem seems sexually charged, but I meant for it to augment the miracle of poetry (for me).. not in a tawdry way (I hope..)
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Thanks for `getting` it, and for reading!  
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Best to all~Amaryllis

Toerag
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8 posted 2010-06-07 03:59 PM


first, you aren't over posting, that used to be my job. Secondly, "sexual", naw, you should have seen all the stuff I had censored here many years ago. (If you want to see some look on the mature forum, "The pond that has no ripples"....that caused some ripples I'll tell ya. Thirdly, don't quit posting, just keep the words flowing, at least yours make sense and are well written, look close at my stuff. LOL
1slick_lady
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9 posted 2010-06-07 04:56 PM


i agree with toe
you are not over posting
don't be silly
i like your poetry
just keep marching

Amaryllis
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10 posted 2010-06-07 05:03 PM


Oh thank you, Toe!  No, what I meant was I`ll wait a bit before putting up another poem.. I`ll still reply & comment, though.. can`t keep me away!  (addicted much? haha)
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Also, thanks for addressing my fear that the poem might be gauche.. I guess it`s all good, hey.. an no, I haven`t been over to the mature corner; haven`t even requested clearance.. guess I`m a prude but I enjoy `hinting` at things rather than blatancy~!      haha
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Feeling at home here on Open Poetry, still  
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Thanks again, piggie-inna-blanket!
~A

Richy
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11 posted 2010-06-07 05:04 PM



Amaryllis, you could never post enough.


Amaryllis
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12 posted 2010-06-07 05:05 PM


An thanks to you too, dear Lady & Richy!  
*warm fuzzies*
Love~A

Toerag
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13 posted 2010-06-07 05:15 PM


Well, don't go to the mature site then cuz you'll be trying to remove my toerag like all the other ladies...LOL...(yassee? when you get old like me it's all talk and fantasy and dreaming). Like George Burns used to say when he was 98, "I'm as good in bed now as when I was 18, just goes to show ya how rotten I was in bed when I was 18."...LOL...you keep posting young lady, seems as though everyone enjoys your work.
Amaryllis
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14 posted 2010-06-07 05:22 PM


Lol, Toe.. if it`s been on thaaat long, don`t know if I`d wanna remove it-?! haha only teasin`.. Yes,  it is true, the older we get the more stimulating the mind is! (I`d love to see an 18 yr. old try & get that one.)  =P  heh!  My oldest is almost 13..(boy).. so I`ll be hitting that whole teenagers-in-the-house stage soon.. ohhh wish me luck!  (don`t know what that had to do w this thread, but anyhow...)  lol
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See ya~
Amaryyyyyyyy

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15 posted 2010-06-12 11:35 PM


Yep, Yep, and Yep .. and then Nope - you better not stop posting.  Sheese - what a silly thought.

I am really enjoying your poetry.

A

Andrew Scott
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16 posted 2010-06-13 12:10 PM


Never stop posting... take it from someone who knows. Your work and insight is a joy to read, and would be a loss to all were it to stop. I bow to you and yours. Oh, and I have to admit... it was a broken heart when I was 19. I believe my first poem started with "Dead on arrival was my cause..." Thankfully we all move on.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Bastet
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17 posted 2010-06-13 12:18 PM


A beautifully balanced poem. I love "dust-loved anthology" and the phrase that starts "the sparrow's spin..." Someone who writes as well as you do cannot over-post. Your poems are a treat to read.
Amaryllis
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18 posted 2010-06-13 02:52 AM


Alison~ Thank you very much, I am honored you stopped by, and by your kind comments.. I admire your work so very much!  
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Andrew Scott~ Thank you also, that is uplifting to hear.. my gratitude !  
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Bastet.. Thank you very much..your kind words are high to me, as I so much admire your talent and natural ear, your work mirrors what I am enjoying in contemporary poetry today.  
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Best to all~Amaryllis

passing shadows
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19 posted 2010-06-13 02:51 PM


a perfect poem! Much enjoyed

and, no, don't think you are over-posting. I would love 3 a day from you, only because that is the limit. That's 21 per week! (that makes it sound less depressing)

Post on!!

Amaryllis
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20 posted 2010-06-13 09:15 PM


Thank you, passing shadows! Your kindness makes me smile  
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Amaryllis

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