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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2010-06-06 09:16 PM

Soliloquy

I am sorting things out
as time takes its toll…

sorting, pushing, separating and
knitting thoughts into throes of
kneading bread again I am

time, taking toll, sorting a push, a
separation of knitted sweaters and
jammies that warmed sinews of
breeding, I am

sorting
pushing
melding, molding, wondering.

I am.

Come find me

for I am traveling
mindless, needless but wanton,
hungry for life, love,

needing
to be wanted in a way not yet
transformed into lonesomeness.

Mindless, wanting, I am
hunger fulfilled on self-grown yeast

I bake myself dry, a cracker to
fulfill some religion’s need…

I am [waiting to be wanton,
solidified into a liquid warm
against your own soul that
cries because it needs such a
being]

Transformed.

© KRJ
Six June 2010

crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

1 posted 2010-06-06 11:41 PM

I have a bad habit of starting to read poems, and never finishing them, but definitely not yours. The writing style was really unique. I don't know how to describe it, but I do know it was amazing.

"needing
to be wanted in a way not yet
transformed into lonesomeness."

↑ My favorite part because many people can empathize.

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

2 posted 2010-06-06 11:47 PM

Ahh, it`s wonderful.. great word confection! =)
Best~Amaryllis

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2010-06-07 12:59 PM

ahhh Karilea
I long to gather these words and keep them in a velvet bag
I am
envious

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2010-06-07 08:03 AM

Yo dear Sunshine,

This is a fairly decent stream of consciousness poem.

Love Bobby

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

5 posted 2010-06-07 09:18 AM

Oh, you too, Karilea. What's going on? Very captivating write indeed!

Love,
Margherita

Martie

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6 posted 2010-06-07 11:42 AM

Sissie...."I bake myself dry"

powerful truths coming from that oven of yours.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2010-06-07 01:59 PM

You can touch so deeply with free style Karilea, and I am sure so many can relate to this. To them I would say, do "something," volunteer, talk to strangers, fill the inner void. This was achingly sad.

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

8 posted 2010-06-07 03:07 PM

Agreeing with Mysteria and others. I think it is a part of knowing we are growing older and feeling we are not needed as much as we once were. We all crave affection and love from someone but more than that I think we need to know we can also help others who have these same feelings. Just feeling I have more than one foot in the same boat you and others are sharing. This alone helps. love to you. A terrific poem again from you. latearrival/jo

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

9 posted 2010-06-07 03:52 PM

I'm sorry about the yeast infection honey?
This truly was interesting and had alot of thought behind it.

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