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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2010-06-03 12:48 PM



there were those moments like cards there
as she played her final few hands
turning the minutes face up and smiling
as if she knew she could win by ending

we spoke of her man of the fish place time
and how she could see him now at her windows
when she closed her eyes for those dreams
the ones that the morphine gave her many of

she said she didn't want to leave her children
but they had already been gone for days
and she guessed it didn't matter to miss them
since they were strangers to a sleeping widow

she wondered how I knew about this, her final hour
and when to show up to take her hand for comfort
so I could guide her over to the other side
where her man of the fish place would be waiting

and did I think he would still take her dancing


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daark

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Margherita
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1 posted 2010-06-03 12:55 PM


Oh, my, how extremely touching, dear D.!

A most beautiful, sensitive, poignant write, the second part to the one you posted a few days ago.


Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2010-06-03 02:25 PM


ms mar..thanks lady friend..yes it is the closing piece to the other one..
Amaryllis
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3 posted 2010-06-04 01:56 AM


Oh this is divine.. I really liked! Understated and still so poignant.
`turning the minutes face up and smiling`.. sublime.  Wonderful write!
~A

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2010-06-04 05:58 AM


thanks ms AM
Eusta B. Mae
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5 posted 2010-06-07 03:17 PM


DS This was a really tender piece of work, I liked it very much. ~ebm
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