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Sunshine
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0 posted 2010-06-02 07:16 PM



Always This

My eyes watched old hands work
the pancake batter thin to stream,
not quite crepe, but in-between
enough to bubble, brown and turn,
watch the steam,
remove the dream to plate.

I made the syrup simple, sure to
add butter to melt sugar brown
into liquid pure, then added bits
of pineapple plus creamy slices
of banana thus a concoction
worthy of memory.

And it is always this,
these very memories
that kindly drift on back
to me to bring your essence
toward the near of elderberry,
vanilla and beer.

Eyes and hands now, of course
are mine; the steam, the
dream, the taste pure fine
are yours in me in essence steeped…
Dad, it is in your basis that
I keep love’s depth so well.

Always this
always yours
where hummingbirds fly
and coffee brews
are made by me
but all for you.

~*~

© KRJ 2 June 2010
For RHR,
2 June 1923-2 Sept 1988


© Copyright 2010 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2010-06-02 07:54 PM


He must have been a lovely man to be portrayed in words, thus.  
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2 posted 2010-06-03 01:39 AM


"Always this
always yours
where hummingbirds fly
and coffee brews
are made by me
but all for you."

He must have been a great Dad...thoughful and heartwarming ending..ww

Chalmette Guy
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3 posted 2010-06-03 08:26 AM


Beautiful. It's true that we live on in those that we love.
Margherita
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4 posted 2010-06-03 09:41 AM


Touchingly beautiful, dear Karilea! It shows how deep the connection still is.

Love,
Margherita

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5 posted 2010-06-03 10:40 AM


This was very pretty gal.
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6 posted 2010-06-04 06:34 AM


those memories are sometimes what keeps us going~~

M

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7 posted 2010-06-04 11:23 PM



If I come over for a visit Karilea, can you make some for me. it sounds delicious.

I'll bet Dad was very proud of you and why wouldn't he be. great poem, loved it and you

Lindsay

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8 posted 2010-06-05 12:08 PM


Lindsay, you and your wife will always
be welcome at my door. Just bring a song
along, and I'll even drop cranberries into
the mix!

That, along with some sausage, bacon, eggs, and great hospitality!

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9 posted 2010-06-06 03:06 PM


Absolutely wonderful.
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10 posted 2010-06-06 03:52 PM


So beautiful, Sunshine.. a real feast for the senses. I especially liked how the image of his hands at culinary work brings him back to you.. I experience a similar sense when I bake bread.. seeing my hands dusted with flour against the counter brings back my mother.. I have her hands, and as I age I see her in my work.
Thanks for the memory, and for this exquisite poem.
Warmly~
Amaryllis

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11 posted 2010-06-12 11:25 PM


You make me smile and think of hands that have reached out to me in love - making me smile as they guided me.

I dunno if I am saying what I am feeling - it's hard to express.

Love you,
A

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12 posted 2010-06-12 11:37 PM


Most excellent! This one speaks to me in a very personal way. One of my father's classic dishes is apple pancakes... again, not too thin as to make crepes, but not so thick as to be traditional pancakes. I've never taken the time to learn how to make these treats, but my eldest daughter did so just recently. And so it lives on. Thank you for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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13 posted 2010-06-13 12:29 PM


An orig9nal way to express memory -- through beautiful sensual images. Indeed a "cocotion worthy of memory.." You make my mouth water for more
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14 posted 2010-06-13 05:42 AM


This is skill but more than that,it is sincere.Beautifullydone.I enjoyed this very much.Arthur(uk)
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