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Alison
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0 posted 2010-05-30 03:06 PM


Rambles of You


I have walked over water for you
That once sprung deep from the sea
The trees still bend in the middle
As we take time each day just to breathe
Their branches reach to embrace you
But you simply refuse to see

I have shared secrets now aloft in the echoes
That once spilled over my face with the rain
They drifted on white clouds of tomorrow
And now have hidden our deepest of pain
They wiped out written-off memories
Forever erased from my brain

I have dusted the frame that is broken and blue
The border fences bitter lines on your face
Like jewelry tucked within cedar boxes of old
You are forgotten and out of place
Each breath we take cuts welts into our hearts
There is no end to this emotional race

-

Alison

[This message has been edited by Alison (05-31-2010 03:18 AM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2010-05-30 06:27 PM


(((Alison))) this is so intense, most beautifully written and very poignant in its melancholy.

Love,
Margherita

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2 posted 2010-05-30 09:03 PM


v. powerful 'penning', Ms. A. !
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3 posted 2010-05-30 09:07 PM


this...
breaks my heart

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2010-05-30 10:34 PM


Yo dear Alison,

This is a very sad poem.

Love Bobby

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5 posted 2010-05-30 10:47 PM


funny how those 'wiped out memories' come back and bite every once in awhile, isn't it...cool write my friend, and like Bobby said...sad...

j.

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6 posted 2010-05-31 01:04 AM


Understanding your pain. latearrival
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7 posted 2010-05-31 02:12 AM



"I have shared secrets now aloft in the echoes
That once spilled over my face with the rain
They drifted on white clouds of tomorrow
And now have hidden our deepest of pain
They wiped out written-off memories
Forever erased from my brain"

Sad but wonderful writing Ali dear.
Hoping all is well

Richard xx

Amaryllis
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8 posted 2010-05-31 03:08 AM


Lovely and poignant.. really takes the reader into the sentiment- wonderful writing!
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9 posted 2010-05-31 10:19 AM


It seems that in our intense emotions some our best writing surfaces...very real, emotional and with the authenticity of a true poet who's heart has to the scar to prove it..very well done.ww


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