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Lamar Cole
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since 2009-05-01
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0 posted 2010-05-29 12:21 PM



What a magical night.
I drowned in your caress.
I'll always remember how cute you looked.
In your silk mini dress.

Pretty long legs.
All lovely and tan.
Looking so good.
You could light up a baseball stand.

When you walked.
All the guys' heads did turn.
For a moment with you.
They would walk through fire.
And get burned.

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Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
1 posted 2010-05-29 08:41 AM


She must be some woman!  I could feel your passion.
Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2010-05-29 10:32 AM


Yo Lamar,

This is pretty nice poem.  However, what is a "baseball stand", is that a "baseball park", or is it a place where they sell baseballs?  You could also just say "ball park".

Bobby


2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
3 posted 2010-05-29 11:35 AM


Hello Lamar, I love the images of the poem...Sexy side, long legs can make crazy but love can be  something else isn't it ?  Keep on the good work...


regards

yann

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