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Storm |
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Michael Deal New Member
since 2010-05-26
Posts 7 |
STORM Rustling are the leaves as the wind whips past Energy fills the air Distant rumble pounds the beat Light dances to the tune Coolness intertwines with the melody of warmth Forcing the clouds to march on their chosen path Pouring out their essence upon a hungry earth Landscapes changing as the performance passes The crack of electricity altering the show Ferocious is it at its very core Yet tranquil peace in all its glory Life scrambles back as the curtain calls Riding waves of cool moist air Distant rumble pounds the beat M.DEAL |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Some really fascinating imagines from this poem. Enjoyed it very much. |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Good imagery...ww |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
I like the symmetry of the "distant rumble" lines, and the metaphor of melody for the coolness and warmth of the convection. I also enjoy the little intricacy of the forced but "chosen path"... that is intuitive, thanks. |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Nice. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Quite a sensate poem: I enjoyed the way your `Distant rumble` lines first heald the approaching storm, then help echo it`s way out of the scene. Well done. |
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