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threadbear
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Indy

0 posted 2010-05-27 10:28 AM


The Magic Dragon

It wore a toad's face, an elephant's trunk    
              and catfish whiskers,
sniffing everything in sight,
buzzing in bottle-fly-pestering circles
emitting a hideous monotonous growl.
The dead came to life, wakened by the cacophony.
Dust danced in twister spirals
and the toils of work glimmered in streaming sunlight.


He shut off the switch to the portable
car vac
and tucked the monster back
into its vinyl mobile cave
satisfied that the Magic Dragon
had transformed his Buick once again
to the girl he used to know.



© Copyright 2010 Jeff Feezle - All Rights Reserved
whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29
Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada
1 posted 2010-05-27 10:35 AM


Clever writing...the first part created the imagery of an adventure and the second brought home the ordinary act of vacuuming your car with a sense of great accomplishment..fun read.ww
Toerag
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Ala bam a
2 posted 2010-05-27 11:43 AM


I know, and the "Dragon's" name was PUFF, right? Very clever write Thread....
Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
3 posted 2010-05-27 03:49 PM


How lovely that the ordinary everyday can result in great poetry.  I got so caught up in the first verse that the "twist" in the second came as a surprise.  Well done.

Helen

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
4 posted 2010-05-27 04:54 PM


I love what your inspiration produced here, dear Jeff. Really cute and very enjoyable.

Love,
Margherita

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
5 posted 2010-05-27 08:10 PM


Your poetry never fails to take the ordinary and turn it into magic.
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