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Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
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Louisiana

0 posted 2010-05-27 09:59 AM


Across a desert
I see a white tower
Rising up to Heaven
Against a cobalt sky
My eyes turned red
From tears of gratitude
And the wind began to howl
Furiously around me
As I knelt at the sight

So many miles
So many years away
Finally I see my destination
Treasure of which I sought
Relic of ancient time
Could it finally be true?

Just as I raise my hands
To the sky in thanks
A cloud passes over the white tower
A chill crosses my heart
With desperate fear
I run towards the sight
Limbs shaking every step
‘til I drop from exhaustion

Face down in sand
Mind a waste, unable to move
Gradually falling into nightmarish sleep
And when I wake I see,
Nothing

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whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29
Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada
1 posted 2010-05-27 10:26 AM


Very expressive imagery... I felt myself racing towards the white tower...very well written..enjoyed the read.ww
Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257
Louisiana
2 posted 2010-05-27 10:27 AM


Thank you Walt.
easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
3 posted 2010-05-29 01:02 PM


It is amazing (I believe) that your white tower - cobalt sky words bring such a strong image or images to mind. I guess we have all seen or seen photos of such scenes... I surely have, even if I cannot recall at the moment exactly what of or where.

As for dreams ending in this way, well, it happens. At least the tower was merely unattainable in this instance, and worse images and emotions didn't usher you into wakefulness.

Hope I have not misinterpreted too badly. Whether I have or not, your poem is a very enjoyable read.

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2010-05-30 04:19 PM


This has a lovely magical quality to it, Calmette Guy, I truly enjoy your writing.
                               Ida

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