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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2010-05-27 04:35 AM


And as the plane prepared to land
at the magic isle of yesterday
the mind rebelled and tried to
unshackle memory.

For a moment free it looked around;
there was nowhere else to go
but still the twist and turn
and the need of an escape route
because it knew the climate there
heartbreakingly severe.

But the plane had been boarded
and the journey pushed by spirit will
carried all the passengers
back into the arms
of the long lost past.

They alighted one by one
into the sun of clarity
and blinked despairingly
at dreams and wishes, needs,
sitting on the tarmac
grinning sheepishly.

And the passengers each one and all
knew always they’d be there
as a draw-card for the brave
who seek again and again
to validate
dreams and wishes, needs!

Helen / 27 May 2010

[This message has been edited by Honeybunch (05-27-2010 07:55 AM).]

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whisperingwalt
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1 posted 2010-05-27 10:18 AM


"And the passengers each one and all
knew always they’d be there
as a draw-card for the brave
who seek again and again
to validate
dreams and wishes, needs!"

Very good read all the way through but i especially liked the ending..ww

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2010-05-27 03:29 PM


Thank you so much, ww! Glad you enjoyed.

Helen

Toerag
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3 posted 2010-05-27 03:52 PM


great ending sweetie..well done..
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4 posted 2010-05-27 04:23 PM


Well done is right - loved the last stanza.
Honeybunch
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5 posted 2010-05-27 04:54 PM


Thanks, Toerag and Mysteria!  "Spirit will" - yes, it takes us on many journeys.

Helen

Earl Brinkman
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6 posted 2010-05-27 08:06 PM


I liked the line `the mind rebelled and tried to unshackle memory`.  Nice.
Amaryllis
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7 posted 2010-05-29 04:03 AM


Wonderful...poignant.  Not all visits to that isle are nostalgic, are they: (`the climate there  heartbreakingly severe`)
I enjoyed this very much. well-written.

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
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Southeastern USA
8 posted 2010-05-29 04:08 AM


Ah, but have you not left us waiting for the bus? Or at least a trudge to town? An excellent read, which I admit I had to reread several times... and another perspective on a journey as old as conscious life itself here.
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