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viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-05-27 01:57 AM


Hope flowed like oil from my fingertips
fueling the lamp burning adult and midnight things
beneath your perfect collarbone;
whispered visible by moonlight
pouring like water through your window.

My heart beat outside my chest
as I scraped gently the night from your entirety
with the callouses on my hands
I memorized you in the darkness.

Hearing your lungs expand with pleased oxygen
I continued to taste your skin
to fold my feelings into harmless words I said quietly in the silence
laying them down on you like a blanket warmed
by someone large,
like me.




Fall in love early, fall in love often.

[This message has been edited by viking_metal (05-27-2010 10:18 AM).]

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2010-05-27 05:29 PM


quote:
to fold my feelings into harmless words I said quietly in the silence
laying them down on you like a blanket warmed
by someone large,
like me.



Very nicely expressed, dear Paul!

Love,
Margherita

whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29
Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada
2 posted 2010-05-27 10:40 PM


Very well written...very descriptive...emotional and authentic...really enjoyed the read..ww
viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2010-05-27 11:13 PM


margopargo, thank you.

WW, thank you for reading all my crap. It delights me that you like it.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
4 posted 2010-05-28 08:54 AM


This was a very visual piece and very well done. And you do look like a large guy too, LOL...my son is a UFC fighter and he's a bear, as I assume you may be. Enjoyed the write.
viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
5 posted 2010-05-28 09:14 AM


I am a competitive strongman. I am 6'4'' and 310.6 lbs.

Thank you very much. I am liking this series more than any I've written so far.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Lamar Cole
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Posts 274

6 posted 2010-05-29 12:37 PM


Very Nice.
viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
7 posted 2010-05-29 02:38 AM


Very thanks.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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