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viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-05-25 02:13 AM


there was a country music club
about halfway between our places
I put on my cheap cowboy hat
bought a two dollar beer for each of us
and danced with you there.

I think you're wonderful, I told you
just like I did
when I saw you to your door
that first velvet summer night together
when you blew wonderful back to me with goodbye words
that dripped silver all over my skin

and we were both oil that night
creating a new viscous solution
that lubricated our aching heart joints better
than anything we'd tried before.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
1 posted 2010-05-25 06:39 AM


Very nice - leaves one wanting more.
whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29
Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada
2 posted 2010-05-25 10:38 AM


"and we were both oil that night
creating a new viscous solution
that lubricated our aching heart joints better than anything we'd tried before."

Nice ending...it does leave one wanting more..good imagery..nice read.ww


viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2010-05-25 11:23 AM


Is the wanting good or bad?

Thank you both!

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2010-05-25 01:08 PM


kewl stuff VM...like the bacon grease smell on a winter morning just before it turns to gravy..
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
5 posted 2010-05-25 01:12 PM


exactly like that, ds. thanks dude.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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Member Rara Avis
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
6 posted 2010-05-29 01:53 PM


I love bacon grease gravy!

A

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