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2islander2
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0 posted 2010-05-22 12:32 PM



You have troubles
and I get mine,
but I can’t help you
cause no one can’t,
troubles are our souls
and souls are rivers
unique lives until
the sea of nowhere,
you have troubles
and I get mine,
I think of that now,
thinking nothing can change
the course except resolution,
soul begins at birth
and ends dramatically,
I just think that now,
I just think of the sky,
of the purple lilacs
of the conquering spring,
of the salted wind
and the flavored clouds,
may be they can help you too….

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2islander2
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1 posted 2010-05-22 12:33 PM


I wrote this for a friend, I wish it could help him even if the poem seems to pretend contrary.


Margherita
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2 posted 2010-05-22 03:48 PM


You have made a beautiful attempt to be close and to help your friend, dear Yann. In love filled closeness there lies the greatest help. I love the conclusion because in Nature we find the presence of our divine resource and this will no doubt contribute to make your friend feel better.

Of course in my opinion what ends "dramatically" is matter/body, I believe that the soul is whole in every moment and eternal.

Love,
Margherita

easy1
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3 posted 2010-05-22 09:50 PM


If this is a cry for help for a friend, then it is a pretty good one, in my humble opinion. Best wishes. Sometimes it doesn't work very well, but you've got to try. That I understand.

Now, hmmm... By "soul", I, too, assume you mean our form of consciousness in this universe, rather than eternally. I really don't believe that Almighty God creates us just to throw us away... (and obviously I am not what you'd call an atheist, either.) Nevertheless, I have read from NDE interviews that the transition, at least, can be dramatic.

As for the writing here, understandable, direct, primitive not in a bad way, and effective. A worthwhile read.

SlowlyFallAway
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4 posted 2010-05-23 10:04 AM


"troubles are our souls"

I feel like that's the best way to put it
Good write.

passing shadows
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5 posted 2010-05-23 10:32 AM


people bounce back, sooner or later, in one way or another

and troubles make us stronger

your friend will be fine
and so will you

2islander2
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6 posted 2010-05-24 01:00 PM


Hello margherita, thanks for your beautiful comment, what I was trying to say is that life ends dramatically , the soul here was not meaning the soul but all what we are feeling in our terrestrial life, your comment makes deep sense and makes me humble and please be indulgent with me .

regards

yann

2islander2
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7 posted 2010-05-24 01:02 PM


thanks easy for the intelligent and enjoyable comment, I totally share your explanation and words and as said Margherita, the meaning of soul was a different one...you put it beautifully in words;

regards

yann

2islander2
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8 posted 2010-05-24 01:03 PM


Thank you PS for the beautiful words.

regards

yann

2islander2
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9 posted 2010-05-24 01:04 PM


Thaqnk you SFA for the read and supportive comment, I owe you this one.

regards

yann

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