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Tooth and Nail
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Tooth and Nail |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy 
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Tooth and Nail All around me, the weather was throwing a tantrum spitting lightning; causing the planet to lurch; general havoc. There were knives in my hands there were knives in your hands and we were a building corner away from letting them get acquainted. You came for me now i am coming for you you were going to stay until you killed me anyhow and that made me brave having nothing to lose. My feline paws padded silently there can only be one master let the knives decide I sharpened them against the concrete you couldn't help but growl and I heard you before you saw me as saber and tooth met leaving only one to ride it out to write it out tooth and nail.  |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Catfight metaphor!... I like it..good job with this one...kept me reading to see where it would go.ww |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
it works artfully and as a superb metaphor You came for me now i am coming for you thanks for the enjoyable read. yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Jeff, you too really sharpened your pen to write so captivatingly about this fight. Very powerful! And such a lovely picture of the feline I adore! Love, Margherita  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jeff...I admit that I cheated and stole a look at the photo and lost the mystery of who held the knife. Much enjoyed anyway as I have a feline friend, or is it she that has me? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
She has you, martie! Great poem, Jeff! You had me going for a few moments there! |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
There are, unfortunately, some people such as that, too... so this composition works on that level also. Very interesting. We've had cat fights around here but usually when a cat dies violently it is a dog's or pair of dog's doing. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Jeff, The idea behind this poem is solid. Bobby |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm glad I kept reading to the picture LOL I was uneasy there for a bit |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
I'm honored and humbled by your responses. Always had a soft spot for cats for some reason. Thought I'd write a first person stalking tale - with a twist! Thanks again, Jeff |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aha...no wonder I meow when reading you.  Kitty grins... K |
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Brooks M Junior Member
since 2010-05-26
Posts 19California |
Reminds me of the larger than life ex tom cat that my friend has.... I think he wrote this through you LOL |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well written my friend, and an excellent photo... j. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Be careful if you lose 8 lives! But thanks for the fun. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
enjoyed the 'cat fight'...well done |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
threadbear - loved this writing, and the picture of innocense... BC |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
mano y mano feline y feline your poem is saber fine Cutting edge!  |
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