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whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

0 posted 2010-05-20 01:48 AM

Lovely Goodbye

In the moment that seemed so short
A life you finally lived
You chose to sing a lovely song
it made drummers drum
and the dancers dance
even the fiddler played
round the table of those unloved
Under the harvest moon,
That knew your name
You stood up when it hurt to sit
Smiled when the darkness
Seem the darkest
Invited us to your home
Somewhere where there was no pain
We baptized you with our tears
And confessed our love for you
Wishing that you had more time
But as the years have come and gone
Your courage remains with us
As we remember that lovely song
That made the drummers drum
The dancers dance
And the fiddler play...
....into that night.

In memory of a beloved friend Don

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

1 posted 2010-05-20 08:46 AM

What a wonderful remembering..touched me to tears. Wish I would have known him. you honor him well. ebm

whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

2 posted 2010-05-20 09:54 AM

ebm, Thank you.

ken206573
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since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

3 posted 2010-05-20 05:14 PM

This is a well described poem of your dear friend. I could simply picture it all, I think your friend would've loved this poem

whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

4 posted 2010-05-21 03:21 AM

Ken, I agree I think he would have liked this too..thanks for the sincere remarks.ww

Lamar Cole
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since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

5 posted 2010-05-21 04:54 AM

Very touching and heartfelt.

threadbear
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since 2008-07-10

Posts 817
Indy

6 posted 2010-05-21 07:50 AM

a touching and loving tribute to your friend, Don. Words sometimes help in healing.
Hoping you heal as well,
Jeff

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2010-05-22 07:24 AM

Deeply poignant, beautiful lines here.

Love,
Margherita

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

8 posted 2010-05-22 07:38 AM

Structured well and a piece that flows very well. You have done honour to a loved one with this poem.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

9 posted 2010-05-31 07:13 PM

And the memory lives on - through you. Very well done. It made me wish to have been a friend as well.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

10 posted 2010-06-05 12:57 PM

A lovely farewell poem for your friend Don

He'll have a big smile on his face when he reads this lovely tribute well done.

Lindsay

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

11 posted 2010-06-05 01:03 AM

A really beautiful elegy. I love the dance and music metaphors. You have turned death and departure into joy and courage. Bravo!

easy1
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since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

12 posted 2010-06-05 01:08 AM

It is lovely elegaic poetry imho. I know the "baptized" image goes with the liquid tears, but I believe "consecrated" would somehow work as well.

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