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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2010-05-19 12:11 PM

Don’t take anything
for granted

Space / time / counts for something

Don’t take approval for granted, as
this weight too soon will fill space
here and there, and there, quite the encumbrance, I say,

for I shall braid hairs not yet grown, in grand,
then braid hairs that should be gray, but stray
to a life beyond mine own ~ and,
I shan’t braid my own, it seems, for I look
forward to those days that life will meet me
on terms of verve and being, that are conditioned
to meet the after before the fore,
and, then, repeat renditions.  Repeat.  Chorus.  Repeat.

Sands to shore and shore to more.  And more.  Then once again.

Survival.

Observe, I see the link of you, my muse,
the times that should be spent, in living well, and digging wells
of life that we’d not repent.  Repeat, perhaps, but not repent.

This, my age, my eon, this search,
to find footprints in shadows of ocean water
as the sand flows out and my feet sink in to
a small quicksand of seize
which I would let take if it would grasp all

but it never does.

A riptide would, if one walks out far enough.

I have never learned to walk that side, or that far.

I take nothing,

Nothing!

For granted.

~*~

(c) 8-24-04
KRJ

threadbear
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Indy

1 posted 2010-05-19 12:14 PM

some Masons take concrete
for granite, Kar,

but the real review is that you seem to be able with considerable ease, to describe the undescribable.
Jeff

Eusta B. Mae
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2 posted 2010-05-19 12:23 PM

I was going to say something altogether different about this poem until I read Jeff's reply ... and I realized he said it best. Bravo! ebm

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2010-05-19 12:27 PM

always a pleasure to look through your soul windows ms..

2islander2
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by the sea

4 posted 2010-05-19 12:30 PM

beautiful soul, beautiful poem, words live...

regards

yann

Martie

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5 posted 2010-05-19 05:48 PM

Wise you are, my sister...and beautiful!

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2010-05-19 06:49 PM

Again, an impactful poem, and yet you write it with such grace--it's a bit like a shot of Patron--goes down like water, but knocks you to yer knees. (sorry for the analogy, but um, I guess that's how you know it's me, huh?)

Probably one of my favorites from you...and ooh, I can drink a lot of Patron.

Margherita
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Eternity

7 posted 2010-05-22 07:29 AM

quote:
This, my age, my eon, this search,
to find footprints in shadows of ocean water
as the sand flows out and my feet sink in to
a small quicksand of seize
which I would let take if it would grasp all

but it never does.

Quite impressive write, dear Karilea.

Thought provoking, profound piece!

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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displaced

8 posted 2010-05-22 09:39 AM

I find myself taking things for granted some days but then I smack myself.

I was flowing in this poem...until I read Karen's reply and then got taken off on a Patron daydream. *adds that to grocery list

whisperingwalt
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9 posted 2010-05-22 11:43 AM

Sunshine,
With every poem I read of yours I so impressed and inspired...you are truly a wise and humble woman who has learned to hear the emotions in your soul and have the awareness to be able to compose words and allow us to share in these moments with you...Bravo and thank you ..ww

Larry C

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10 posted 2010-05-31 07:51 PM

Rightly so and so delightful.

lucky
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11 posted 2010-06-02 03:10 AM

just stopped by... your title caught
me, I like this.

dale

Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again...
~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~

easy1
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12 posted 2010-06-02 10:07 AM

Title and username and number of comments pulled me in... Taking with me respect for the poet, and also reminders of small quicksands being best, and of when I took hair for granted.

Sunshine

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13 posted 2010-06-02 07:23 PM

Our readers never make it easy to remain
humble...

thank you very much...

but it does make us work harder to give you
something more to read.

Thank you for the push...

and for the unspoken acceptance that only
the readers might take back with them.

Prasad Nataraj
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Bangalore,India

14 posted 2010-06-04 05:45 AM

Delightful read.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

The Lady
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The Southwest

15 posted 2010-06-07 01:05 AM

"Observe, I see the link of you, my muse,
the times that should be spent, in living well, and digging wells
of life that we’d not repent. Repeat, perhaps, but not repent."

it's about that muse Karilea
and that link

magnificent!

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

16 posted 2010-06-09 12:33 PM

As alwasy, I bow to you and yours. Another fine write in style. content, and message.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Kethry D
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17 posted 2010-06-09 04:33 AM

Such skill and savoir faire. I wish my gift was to write images in the way you do.

A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof.

Rene Char

LindsayP
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18 posted 2010-06-11 11:50 PM

Dear Karilea that is a very intrigueing

write my dear, makes one stop and think.

well written, a thought provoker. love

Lindsay

Kaoru

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where the wild flowers grow

19 posted 2010-06-12 01:26 AM

"for I shall braid hairs not yet grown, in grand,
then braid hairs that should be gray, but stray
to a life beyond mine own"

Amazing work, but you know that, don't you? I love your writings.

Kit McCallum

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20 posted 2010-06-12 12:08 PM

"I shan’t braid my own, it seems, for I look
forward to those days that life will meet me
on terms of verve and being, that are conditioned
to meet the after before the fore,"

There is much to ponder within this piece Karilea, and much to learn. I enjoyed this very much.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

Amaryllis
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Mi now

21 posted 2010-06-12 12:37 PM

This is a beautiful plea to slow down, embrace life`s gifts.. enjoyed the second strophe especially, the sound of the ocean`s waves repeated in your wording.
Lovely poem, thank you for sharing it

~Amaryllis

Richy
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Posts 3050

22 posted 2010-06-12 01:52 PM

For every wish granted, so goes, another dream.

Yes, how nice it would be that if instead of granted, we would all try and take things more for, gratitude.

This was lovely Karilea!
Richard xx

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