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whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

0 posted 2010-05-18 02:14 AM

Leafs of Change

Insecure leafs of autumn
Don't know what to do
The branches still feel strong
But their grip is weakening
They blossomed through the spring
And provided shade in the summer
Now it's time to
fall,
gently,
floating,
swaying,
releasing to the process of nature
Insecure leafs of autumn
Land gently upon each other
anticipating,
resigned,
quietly,
waiting,
to be raked away.

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

1 posted 2010-05-18 08:41 AM

I liked this very much. even though today I feel like an autumn leaf getting raked away. I was moved by this piece Ww. Good job! ebm

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

2 posted 2010-05-18 08:44 PM

The feel of the words are like leaves falling from a tree. That took some effort and skill.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
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3 posted 2010-05-18 09:23 PM

I remember when first seeing your name
I had thoughts of the
name "Whispering Bill"...

so I "read" this poem in that voice,
tone, sound.

It is beautiful!

Thank you.

Bastet
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since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

4 posted 2010-05-18 11:36 PM

I love poems about nature. This one is a complete metaphor on its own. Structure echoes the meaning -- the gradual fading aawy of the season. Bravo!

whisperingwalt
Member

since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

5 posted 2010-05-19 02:57 AM

Sunshine, I read the poem back whispering and I understand what you mean.

Thanks to all the rest for taking time to read and responding in your unique ways.ww

threadbear
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since 2008-07-10

Posts 817
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6 posted 2010-05-19 03:06 AM

one leaf's shelter
is another's shade
so let us blend, they whispered,
blade upon blade
and they matched the wood's pale
until they fell into grace
one leaf's shelter
is another leaf's shade.

inspired by you, Walt. Loved your poem, and the metaphors.
Jeff

whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

7 posted 2010-05-19 03:12 AM

Jeff, honoured to have inspired you...ww

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