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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2010-05-16 06:09 PM


Fact or fiction--
play the game.
"Tell me darlin',
what's your name?"

"Who would you like me to be,
temporarily?

Call me mamma, if you like--
or baby, if you like that game.
But I suggest you bring your best--
hot for teacher? Take the test.

Anything you like at all...
I'll shrink to fit or grow quite tall.
I understand you need release--
a prison guard, if you say please,
sweetly to me, on your knees..."

Oh yes, I can be any thing--
as long as I remain no one--
I will allow you everything,
with the exclusion of my love.

Now tell me--

what's my name?"

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Andrew Scott
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1 posted 2010-05-16 06:48 PM


Not touchin' this one, 'cept to say, "Every man's fantasy and every man's sin." Well written ending. Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2010-05-16 07:21 PM


You seem like a smart guy.



Thanks for reading.

Andrew Scott
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3 posted 2010-05-16 08:03 PM


It's a matter of self preservation. But I'll take being smart when ever somebody is willing to offer it.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2010-05-16 08:12 PM


I hope I don't disappoint, but it's just a pome. But I do enjoy some intelligent repartee.



This was actually inspired by some recent readings of Dylan Thomas (if you felt a shudder, that's him rolling over in his grave)but nod, in his collection, I found some very amusing and naughty intendre, and no comparison is intended. I just thought it refreshing to find a highly esteemed poet having so much fun. And this is what came of that.

Lawsy.

Earl Brinkman
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5 posted 2010-05-16 08:18 PM


A little naughty but very clever!
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2010-05-16 08:26 PM


Thank you, Earl. I suppose I should have left it as a riddle, but lately my internet connection is kinda in-and-out.

I thank you much for your time and consideration, and would like to send my love to all. (I was writing in character, afterall. )


threadbear
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7 posted 2010-05-16 10:00 PM


Nicely penned to blue, Serenity.
Sometimes it bothers me that everyone has some other name on the internet, and a personality they carefully cultivate.
We are the souls
without eyes to be seen by.
Jeff

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2010-05-16 11:01 PM


Jeff? *laughing* If I could carry character and tone consistently--nod--I'd have written a book by now. Er..maybe?

But actually, I do remember a time when I'd try to write a poem for each forum, in whatever appropriate mood for each forum. (Any mood goes for open forum, but a gloomier perspective for Dark, Spiritual for um, spiritual, just as a writing exercise.)

OH.

Came back to add--not that I think this is a work of art or anything, but it was fun to write just for fun again.
And it wasn't enough to accomplish the feat--I tried to do it as quickly as possible.

Sometimes I think those days were much more fun for me, even though the quality suffered for the quantity--I found it rather fun some nights to ramble pell mell through the forums and make my attempts at "method writing".

You should try it! (Not a dare or a challenge, but it's just fun to see if you can write something that you're NOT feeling and have it be convincing--you win if someone asks if you're okay! *chuckle*)

Thanks for reading, doll.

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2010-05-17 01:08 AM


Something to think about...James
Sunshine
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10 posted 2010-05-19 01:42 PM


Okay, before I read the answers, Alice,
I think I need to go find the White Rabbit...
he may well have the answers.

This had a great Lewis Carroll feel to it.






Marchmadness
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11 posted 2010-05-20 01:50 AM


That's what I like about your writing, Karen. Never dull.
                             Ida

SlowlyFallAway
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12 posted 2010-05-20 05:16 PM


woooowwww this was really good. i enjoyed it
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13 posted 2010-05-21 03:17 PM


Are you okay???

LOL... You're always a winner in my book, lady... and whatever the inspiration, we all know how well this applies to internet life. *S* Of course... some of us find memory slipping away in senior moments all too ofte ... we have to be truthful... that's all we can remember! LOL

lucky
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14 posted 2010-06-02 04:27 PM


I am okay..! however there does seem to be
a growing number who...

Hi Karen, just to let you know I've but I
can't tell you how long...

Always nice to read your works.

dale

Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again...
~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~


serenity blaze
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15 posted 2010-06-03 12:14 PM


I am so happy to see you here, lucky...

My gratitude goes out to all of you, but Dale is a heart-favorite of mine because I do feel his stream of conscious musings.

As for there being "a growing number, who?" Ah well.

You win a few, you lose a few. That "growing number" who wonder can cop a squat on the salutation of mah middle finger...

Love to you, Dale and my love to you all.


easy1
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16 posted 2010-06-06 02:09 PM


This has a very strong feeling of deja vu to it. So, I shall call you "Deja", whether that be your name or no.
Lamar Cole
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17 posted 2010-06-06 02:50 PM


Where love is excluded. Only lust sadly remains.
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