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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-05-11 05:24 PM


The clock is loud when ticking so
in tune with pain and anguish
and sleep that would come marching in
takes a backward step
and retreats into the archives
of a woman’s memory.

I do remember sleep from days of long ago
when it crept up sweet and silently
and draped a sense of peace
over everyone in need
but these days it seems to be
in the grip of dementia.  

Sleep has forgotten how it used to be
and can’t regain its sense of propriety
amidst the insistent and repetitive
tick-tock, tick-tock,
of that infernal clock.

But maybe it’s a rebel
with tattoos, rings, and studs,
crying for acceptance
of its new way of being
but it matters not, you see,
because it’s simply not here!

Helen / 11 May 2010


© Copyright 2010 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2010-05-15 02:19 PM


Dear Helen, that tick-tock can be really very disturbing. Talk sweetly to sleep and it will embrace you as before. I agree though the unencumbered sleep of youth can't be experienced with the same intensity. I have such thoughts too.
Ticking clocks are off limits in bedrooms here too ...

Love and sweet dreams.
Margherita

Andrew Scott
Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
2 posted 2010-05-15 03:24 PM


My wife would definitely echo your sentiments so elegantly stated here. Many a night has been spent in search of that most elusive balm to the day’s troubles. Thanks for sharing. It is always a pleasure to read.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
3 posted 2010-05-18 10:07 PM


Honeybunch - sorry to hear this sad writing from you. No sleep is a real bummer, as I've been there. Wish you the best...

BC

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2010-05-20 02:09 AM


I so get this, Helen.
                 Ida

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
5 posted 2010-05-20 03:26 AM


I can understand how difficult it is to fall to sleep at times. ---- I think that this was written very well and will gather lots of readers.
N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360
New Orleans
6 posted 2010-05-20 04:18 AM


I'm still struggling with Insomnia myself, the poem fits sleepless nights perfectly.

Beautifully captured.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
7 posted 2010-05-20 03:26 PM


Thanks everyone for your comments.  Falling asleep isn't my problem but staying asleep is - and I can't even claim responsibility for it because ... I'm asleep.  

Helen

ken206573
Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487

8 posted 2010-05-20 05:10 PM


I hope you can get some sleep soon. The poem was nice if only we can stop the tick, tock for ya.


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