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whisperingwalt
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0 posted 2010-05-06 05:41 PM



Dare to Sing

As we journey through this life
Many thoughts we accumulate
Some as sharp as a knife
Other we just accommodate

In some moments we behave
Unlike the courageous of the land
Hiding fearful in our caves
Unwilling to lend even a hand

Though our courage seems amiss
When we stand and look away
Ignorance is no longer bliss
When the darkness turns to day

To hide in the attic
Will not silence thunder
To get rid of guilt's static
Or load that they're under

We must leap to the defence
Of the helpless and weak
Wipe the tears from the lens
Become the hero that they seek

Dare to sing the new song
That heals the wounded heart
From all that went wrong
When their hearts came apart.


© Copyright 2010 Walter Aguilar - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2010-05-06 07:52 PM


Yo Whisperingwalt,

Your well written poem has good rhyme and rhythm.  I like it just fine.

Bobby

whisperingwalt
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2 posted 2010-05-06 09:10 PM


Yo Bobby,
Thanks for the positive feedback.

Eusta B. Mae
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3 posted 2010-05-07 04:04 PM


"Dare to sing the new song
That heals the wounded heart
From all that went wrong
When their hearts came apart"

I like this stanza the best because it touched me the most, thanks- ebm

whisperingwalt
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4 posted 2010-05-07 04:18 PM


You're welcome. Most of us or if not all of us have had the feeling of our hearts coming apart...nothing compares to hearing the song of unconditional love when that happens.
LeeJ
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5 posted 2010-05-07 08:53 PM


beautifully written!
whisperingwalt
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6 posted 2010-05-08 01:33 AM


Lee,
   Thanks for your positive words.

LindsayP
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7 posted 2010-05-11 11:34 PM



Dare to sing the new song
That heals the wounded heart
From all that went wrong
When their hearts came apart.


Walt that is a very noble undertaking
my friend. You wrote it well.

Lindsay

Earl Brinkman
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8 posted 2010-05-12 12:30 PM


Hiding in the attic while the weak are oppressed is no way to solve the problem.  Like you say we have to dare to sing a new song.
whisperingwalt
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Coquitlam, BC, Canada
9 posted 2010-05-12 01:00 AM


Earl & Lindsay,
Thanks guys for taking time to read my poem and your feedback.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2010-05-15 12:58 PM


Enjoyed...James
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