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Maybe Baby |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Maybe I spoke too soon Maybe Cupid's venom is an elixir of the heart after all When the posturing is done When the games and bravado pass away and there alone stands a man's heart there alone stands his soul spilled out on the page perhaps then perhaps then something can begin when she says, "this is the real man" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
When the posturing is done When the games and bravado pass away and there alone stands a man's heart there alone stands his soul spilled out on the page perhaps then ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Those lines could stand alone. A very humbling poem and I liked your title too. Way to go, Martini man~ |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Thanks Blues. I like your edit, I will consider it. It does suit the title better that way. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Perhaps then Perhaps then... I like the hope, the humility,desperation, the detachement feelings these two lines bring up. Creative title...well done. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
love isn't easy I guess, there is a first part and then it really begins...Thanks for the poem. yann |
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