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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2010-05-05 11:29 AM


Along shores of windswept time
Far away from my conscious mind
Lies a place of virgin grace
Where water sparkles a vintage wine

There I am to cleanse my soul
Torn apart by this growing hole
Its light devoured by night
Heeding not the thing it stole

Time is short and fading fast
Descending from now unto the past
And in this place of virgin grace
I wish that time could last

Unto this place I speed along
Seeing all and what went wrong
Taking bits of me from reality
Until I am totally gone

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Juju
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In your dreams
1 posted 2010-05-05 04:53 PM


I like this one

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2010-05-05 04:55 PM


Thank you Juju. I figure no one would, but said what the hell.
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3 posted 2010-05-06 01:06 PM


Time is short and fading fast
Descending from now unto the past
And in this place of virgin grace
I wish that time could last

Does that place have an address? GPS coordinates? *S*

The tone of the ending is bleak... but sometimes looking back is the only way to step forward. May you like what you see, my friend... as much as I like the words from your pen!

ken206573
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4 posted 2010-05-07 11:21 AM


I enjoyed reading this poem.


Eusta B. Mae
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5 posted 2010-06-23 02:59 PM


oooh I love that first stanza!EBM
Marchmadness
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6 posted 2010-06-23 03:12 PM


Beautiful Poem, Calmette Guy, I have become a fan of your poetry.
                                Ida

Chalmette Guy
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7 posted 2010-06-23 03:15 PM


This was an old one brought up, thanks ebm.
An old one written too.


Thank you MM...I am left speechless, and wish I could do justice to your reply.

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