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0 posted 2010-04-29 02:37 PM



This poem is about my fighting between my biological father and I. The structure is horrible. Keep that in mind while reading.

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Your easy shaken
Please don't stir
The emotions deep
Which never teeter
On the brink of destruction
Of a perfect complexion
You wish for best
But hope for rest
For the quarrels and fights
Leave you tired in their plights
You change your smiles
And prepare for war
You endure all the while
Because its happen before

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1 posted 2010-04-30 12:27 PM


Zach, at least there is the outlet of poetry...  I like the subtle nod to James Bond with the "shaken" and "stir".  

"Do you expect me to talk?"
"No, Mr. Bond...  I expect you to"  WRITE!

Keep channeling & things just may resolve themselves...


-MVS

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2 posted 2010-04-30 02:39 PM


haha thanks. I liked that line from Bonds. Yeah, hopefully things will resolve themselves.
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