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Namyh
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0 posted 2010-04-29 12:36 PM


Bleak and Bliss

On the slope of a hilltop,
a steep mountain did drop
down to the rapids of a river named Syn.

Panic in the rain's roar
plunged on its slanted floor.
Bleak, on a horse of bones, galloped down the wind.

Behind, Greed and Envy rode their palomino steeds
with Wrath next to Lust, and Chaos in the night.
To a town called Choice raced Bleak and his marauders
'cross a moon where horses shine skinless in the light.

Daylight would be coming soon,
sizzling hot the sand dunes.
Faith, Hope and Charity waited dawn's light to kiss.

Their horses neighed a cry !
Love and Justice looked to sky.
On the rays thrown from Sun like a fist galloped Bliss.

On streaks of sultry sizzling sand, his horse Sunlight burned red.
Bliss waved a hand and beckoned with a blast of booming voice.
Off the sand dune they did heed, self-propelled by hoofs of speed,
to catch Sunlight's blistered blaze now inbound and aimed for Choice.

And flickering 'cross horizon stars
betwixt the moonlight's beams and bars,
Bleak and Bliss rode prairies 'til they reached a half-mile gap.

Seeing Choice ahead, they tightened reins
to jump that impasse half-mile gain,
and fearless leaped the chasm, hoofs in air, landing pat.

Our human halves of Bleak and Bliss
are flaws and strengths we would commit
to reach a Choice that we need make
requires always….. some Leap of Faith.

Namyh



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1 posted 2010-04-29 02:08 PM


I can not believe this is not read by more, what a wonderful story, and lesson.  Well done!
Namyh
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2 posted 2010-04-30 03:24 AM


Mysteria – If it’s read by only person who loved it, it’s enough to put a pep in the step of these old bones. Thanks Mysteria for your wonderful words. So very glad you enjoyed. Namyh
Klassy Lassy
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3 posted 2010-04-30 09:52 PM


This is a marvelous personification of emotions that challenge the human spirit.  The images are gripping and could see the horses hooves fly across the chasms.  I loved the entire poem, but this line set the tone of the poem early and I was stunned reading it, for both bones and wind can be so hollow.

I hope more people read it, too.  The poem is alive.

Karen

LindsayP
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4 posted 2010-04-30 10:35 PM



Namyh I would just like to second Mysteria's

comment. You wrote it well.

Take care

Lindsay

Namyh
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5 posted 2010-05-01 01:19 AM


Karen – You are the Energizer Bunny. I have been plugged in and turned on with your wonderful words. These old bones have been reinvigorated. No poet of worth could ask for more than for a poetic creation to be deemed “alive” as recognition that it touched something deep in the human spirit. Karen, It’s the greatest honor and I thank you for it. Namyh
P.S. – Now where did I put that 10 gallon hat. My head’s startin’ to swell. LOL

Namyh
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6 posted 2010-05-01 01:22 AM


Lindsay – The swelling’s not going down. I’m gonna need a bigger hat. And to also be invigorated by your words puts a big smile in my day. Thanks Linday for stopping in. You’re an Energizer Bunny too. I’m proud! LOL Namyh

Klassy Lassy
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7 posted 2010-05-02 10:57 AM


I think my grandon wore that 10 gallon hat to prom last night!   LOL    Love your poems!  I should have been reading them much earlier.  They are wonderful, but I'm here so sporadically, so I'll have to delve into the archives!  ~Karen  
Namyh
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8 posted 2010-05-02 02:36 PM


Karen – Now I know what happened to that hat. Kids!  But it’s good and okay, he’ll grow into it. We were all once that age. I think. I am so honored by your wonderful words. So very proud you love the works. Archives, hope you find some goodies there. Thanks Klassy Lassy. Namyh
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