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naturegirl
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since 2009-09-30
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England

0 posted 2010-04-26 04:50 PM


Walking side by side,
babbling brook rushing by,
sheep grazing, ruminating idly,
watching us with disinterest,
we enter the fairytale.
Green mossed boulders by
ancient smooth stone slabs
laid as if by
giants, haphazardly tossed in
immense crazy paving, worn
silken by constant feet
passing by. Our heads
thrown back, searching intently
for tree-creepers, following
knarled tree trunks upwards
past disfigured limbs in
tortured pose. Diseased bark
portraying grotesque faces that
leer and watch as
night draws in, changing
the mood, fairytale haven,
a hellish nightmare waiting.
Hurrying back we swop
glances, malevolent eyes watch.

[This message has been edited by naturegirl (04-26-2010 06:01 PM).]

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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 posted 2010-04-26 09:49 PM


Yo dear Naturegirl,

This is well written.  I like your use of the word "swop".

Love Bobby

MARK V SHELDON
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2 posted 2010-04-26 09:54 PM


Both places are intriguing --thank you for the visual journey.  Reminded me of a REALLY old-school computer text adventure game called "Advent"...

-MVS

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[This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (04-27-2010 12:09 AM).]

naturegirl
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since 2009-09-30
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England
3 posted 2010-04-28 06:21 AM


Thank you gentlemen for your kind replies. Much appreciated.

Julie

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