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WTBAKELAR
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0 posted 2010-04-26 02:19 PM


Instinct



Time stood still,

As if all clocks had stopped,
And the summer breezes that carried away their thoughts,
Blew gently through their cares and whisked them off to yesterday,

They walked;
Leaving footprints in silken sand,
Turning every now and then,
To watch the lapping waves wash them off to nowhere,

Side by side,
Carefree nothings,
Not spoken, but felt, inside,
Felt in the heart, the soul,
Warmth, deep pleasing comfort,

And flutters,

Like a swarm of butterflies, headed south for the winter,
The massive, uncountable flutters,
In the rhythm that hears their desires,
Fixated on the same thing,
What pulls them? What drives them?

Instinct,
That built in knowledge,
That tells them: when they have achieved their goal,
Something about it; is right,

It’s just right; it’s what they do,
And they know,

And they knew,

Those feelings; in each others arms,

Time stood still.

The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked.

© Copyright 2010 Wm. Tracey Bakelar - All Rights Reserved
Lamar Cole
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1 posted 2010-04-26 05:09 PM


Very Nice.
Dadygoose
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2 posted 2010-04-26 10:09 PM


Oh, how impossibley beautiful.
Yes, it is primal, universal and instinctual.
How comforting to know such a fantasy can be shared, wordlessly, with someone I will care about.  It reminds me that, even as I sleep, someone is also dreaming and fantasizing too, and that realization brings tears to my eyes, so I can’t read it very often.
I have already read enough on Pip for one day and I have to stop.
Your stuff is so very, very strong and I will keep it, if you don’t mind.
GN
Jaime

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Andrew Scott
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3 posted 2010-04-26 11:47 PM


I bow to you and yours. This was an excellent piece with fine content. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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4 posted 2010-04-27 12:23 PM



Hi Tracy I enjoyed your poem my friend but to be honest, I enjoy your rhyming poetry better. All the best. Take care.

Lindsay

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5 posted 2010-04-27 09:13 AM


Lamar,   thank you so much for taking the time to comment on my thoughts.

Tracey

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6 posted 2010-04-27 09:14 AM


Dadygoose,  your wonderful comments made my day,  thank you so very much for these beautiful words and sentiments.

Love like this always,
Tracey

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7 posted 2010-04-27 09:16 AM


Andrew, your thoughts are so appreciated,

thank you for taking the time to comment.

Tracey

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8 posted 2010-04-27 09:31 AM


Lindsay,   Thank you my dear friend for your thoughts and comments,   I like trying different methods of expression, and I am glad you enjoyed this one,  

take care,  
Tracey

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9 posted 2010-04-27 12:33 PM


Dear Tracey.
I really have to go, but I forgot to tell you that your poem  is also about something that is very WHOLESOME and very NATURAL.
To very loosely parafrais something I once read: is not heaven found in the arms of one's beloved?
And ... you don't even have to wait for heaven until after you die!!!!
Tracey, if yesterday I made your dan, then today you have already made mine double.  And I truly, truly mean it.
I better get off the computer now, tummy grouling, and I  do have to go NOW.
:---From the bottom of my heart----)
Jaime

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10 posted 2010-04-28 11:48 AM


Dear Son;  How nice to see you on PIP again.  I don't get on very much any more, I just seem to have toooo much to do.  This is a wonderful peace. But, then you always do bring up some thing right from the heart. Your words are always so touching and I love to read what you have done.  Love to all   Mom
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11 posted 2010-05-06 12:55 PM


I've read this on several peek-ins... and it touches me more with every read. Simply put... it's gorgeous!!
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