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passing shadows
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0 posted 2010-04-23 10:25 AM



Between the clinking of ice in my glass
and the tapping of ashes from my cigarette,
there is a sadness...a guitar playing
soft and slow...a dragon-slaying

and I lost the bet.


© Copyright 2010 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2010-04-23 10:33 AM


Sad

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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2 posted 2010-04-23 05:01 PM


I am sorry you are so sad today, Dixie.
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3 posted 2010-04-23 05:53 PM


I like the clinking of ice in the glass;

I read this a few times.  the first time I was thinking about some hooker at a casino, but then you mention a dragon slaying and then I lost my train of thought..

I think this poem left the clinking of ice in my brain.


take care

Andrew Scott
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4 posted 2010-04-23 06:04 PM


"... while my guitar gently weeps." Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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5 posted 2010-04-23 09:47 PM


really liked this but not so much the last line.

Z.

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6 posted 2010-04-24 09:54 AM


thanks for the replies


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7 posted 2010-04-24 10:33 AM


excellent write, short and efficient and full of soul...a great one..

regards

yann

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8 posted 2010-04-24 02:26 PM


Stays in the mind.
                 ida

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9 posted 2010-04-24 05:41 PM


Sometimes you don't lose - you just step backwards for a time.

Love you,
A

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10 posted 2010-04-24 11:28 PM


Rocks on almost every path, my friend, and if not rocks, then tree-roots, dips in the ground, dead animals --- whatever...always something to trip you up...the only total disaster though is not living anything.

Give me life and somehow I'll survive the rest (albeit not painlessly - and speaking emotional pain here; make me a resident in the burn ward (or the like) of a hospital and I'd surely sing a different tune).

Still. . . my preference (and easy for me to say, huh?) Definitely not uncaring though, my friend - not that for sure.


j.

Prasad Nataraj
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11 posted 2010-04-25 10:44 AM


Great feeling of sadness in this write….

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

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