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Juju
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In your dreams

0 posted 2010-04-23 12:19 PM


Abstract Random

In every sense
I've been catergorized
And filed away

You call me insane
With scattered memories
and forsaken dreams

But all these pieces
I can rearrange em
And change my small world

You don't understand
But I am in control
And you can't keep me

I am too wild
And unpredictable
To even listen

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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1 posted 2010-04-23 04:47 AM


Beautifully Captured
Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2010-04-23 08:33 AM


Is it sane to be called insane, or to realize that you are?
Well done. Great stuff Juju.

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2010-04-23 09:58 AM


me too girl

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2010-04-23 01:01 PM


Yo Juju,

There you go Hon.

Love Bobby

MorningStar
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5 posted 2010-04-23 01:12 PM


That's right.

If I don't say it...who will?

Laverne Pacquire
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6 posted 2010-04-23 05:49 PM


I am too wild
And unpredictable
To even listen


This reminds of a passage in the bible i forget which one but it refers to someone being of spirit and how this person is unpredictable like the wind, you don't know if they are coming or going  ;but they are of an incredible spirit no one can avoid this person.  

its a beautiful passage.   these three lines made me think of this person with spirit.

take care

Andrew Scott
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7 posted 2010-04-23 06:29 PM


An excellent piece.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (04-23-2010 11:04 PM).]

Zeigeist
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8 posted 2010-04-23 09:43 PM


liked it...real smooth.

Z.

2islander2
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by the sea
9 posted 2010-04-24 10:35 AM


We have to resist evertime we think, thanks for the excellent write, a very trustful share...

regards

yann

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10 posted 2010-04-26 10:22 AM


Robert Frost never wrote poems like this.  
I think he hated it because its was simple and not filling to the senses.

I also think this poem is not filling to the senses, to be honest, its horrible.

Juju
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In your dreams
11 posted 2010-04-26 02:49 PM


No I am not Robert Frost, but I am full of myself.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Earl Brinkman
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12 posted 2010-06-09 09:12 PM


The disparity between a state of agitation an asserted self control leaves the reader with a sense that the protagionist is deluding himself.  A nice write if perhaps an incorrect interpretation on the part of the reader.  Words often have two meanings.
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