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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-04-21 04:36 PM



In all my years
in all my travels
never have I come across a town
as dead as this

the halls and walls of San Francisco
do, by the bay, resemble it
in a familiar way

but never as old
and never as cold
as this place

it's as if the souls
the spirits
that drift
are unaware of the others here

in this mist
this myth

of strange facts

like why
why here
in this particular place
in this particular frame
of this particular human, race
find them with no God
a soft melancholic face

why this country
of all the countries
the most agnostic
the toast of the atheistic
a realm of disbeliefs

surrounded by statues
resembling miscreant beings
in socialist reliefs

and so go the souls
that I've seen
in orbish double bubble form
floating with ne're a trouble

so silent
so alone
knowing only this space

these cobblestones
these walls these bricks
have emptied their souls
and become their faith


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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

1 posted 2010-04-22 01:56 PM


interesting write...I wondered how you were going to finish off the loneliness of its essence and then I read this:

"these cobblestones
these walls these bricks
have emptied their souls
and become their faith"

...well done...you make that loneliness almost poignant

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2010-04-22 04:58 PM


Yo Martiniat8,

Welcome to Philly.  Once you get to know us, you'll find that we're just oodles of fun.

Bobby

OldBuddyOldPal
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since 2008-12-15
Posts 87

3 posted 2010-04-22 05:51 PM


I really liked this.
Such wonderful descriptive words.
Bravo!

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
4 posted 2010-04-22 11:43 PM




outstanding work


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