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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-04-21 04:33 PM



"Silence! Silence!"
and the room grew cold and quiet

the mind cleared as did the gentle room in the rear

she moved silent through the shadows
barefoot and swift
the only sound, that of her thighs
and long satin sash

turn on the lights
and she's gone
to guide her spirit
that glides beyond

a look in her eyes
and you can see
all that crying, trembling
hysterically

what to do
what to do
with a soul
so lost and confused

too dangerous to touch
too tumultuous to clutch

too afraid to be alone

© Copyright 2010 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
Laverne Pacquire
Member
since 2009-11-15
Posts 96

1 posted 2010-04-21 08:03 PM


A little bit bland for me but some points are good.

these lines are pretty :

the only sound, that of her thighs
and long satin sash

turn on the lights
and she's gone
to guide her spirit
that glides beyond


these lines have feminine mystique.


take care

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