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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2010-04-20 07:29 AM



yesterday you wore joseph coat colors
and black boots and those diamonds
you wear in your eyes for the dawns
with your jaunty on walking quickly

and I was reading hemingway and smoke
from a whispering fuente that was handy
wishing you would say something vulgar
like hello or good morning mister softly

but you remained proper poised polite
and then you stopped just long enough
to step on my mind as it writhed serpentine
at those ankle seams of your hurry hesitation

I wrinkled a pout into a sunburned smile
when you giggled little girl stuff
and then turned back to your flight
lady gliding those moments like lifetimes

that disappeared into your yellow submarine

____________

daark (xanthous series)

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1 posted 2010-04-20 11:30 AM


hmmm, I have missed this.

A

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2010-04-20 12:16 PM


ms ali-san..thank you little one
Margherita
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3 posted 2010-04-23 01:59 PM


quote:
I wrinkled a pout into a sunburned smile
when you giggled little girl stuff
and then turned back to your flight
lady gliding those moments like lifetimes

that disappeared into your yellow submarine



Sigh, this is one of those that make me want to do somersaults for the sheer pleasure you stir.

Spectacular stuff.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2010-04-23 03:38 PM


ms mar...you bless me with your eyes!!
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5 posted 2010-04-23 11:19 PM


"but you remained proper poised polite
and then you stopped just long enough
to step on my mind as it writhed serpentine
at those ankle seams of your hurry hesitation"

all of it is great, but the visuals in the above are simply amazing...always a pleasure to read your work

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2010-04-24 06:34 AM


steavenr..thannnks amigo
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7 posted 2010-04-24 09:56 AM


pretty darn good

missed reading you

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2010-04-24 10:10 AM


thanks lady!!
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9 posted 2010-04-24 04:33 PM


I must go and find my jaunty...loved this!
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10 posted 2010-04-24 04:35 PM


and then you stopped just long enough
to step on my mind as it writhed serpentine
at those ankle seams of your hurry hesitation

Now that was da bomb!

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2010-04-24 05:32 PM


ms martie...thanks neighbor...

_______________

ms myst...you smile me, thanks so much

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