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therightside
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since 2009-12-09
Posts 64
USA

0 posted 2010-04-20 03:02 AM



Crush me up or melt me down
take me in, just use me.
I’ll run through your veins
and you'll never forget
the Euphoria of being on Me.
I’ll etch my initials
on each of your thoughts,
my vibration will echo inside you.

Whispering...
Crush me up or melt me down
take me in, just use me.
I’ll give power to your doubt,
and make you doubt your own power;
you’ll wish that you never had met me.
I'm redemption, not blame
Reminder of pain
left in the wake,
of your careless and reckless abandon.

So, you crushed me up, you melted me down
You took me in, it was easy.
And I hope it was worth
your dignity and pride,
I'll be leaving
and I’m taking them with me.

[This message has been edited by therightside (04-20-2010 03:34 PM).]

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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

1 posted 2010-04-20 11:52 AM


nice write with a very nice ending...my favorite line was:

"I’ll etch my initials
on each of your thoughts"

...love how this drew a picture in my mind

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
2 posted 2010-04-23 04:19 PM


Especially like the last two lines.  That's true of a lot of stuff and you nailed it right there.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

OldBuddyOldPal
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since 2008-12-15
Posts 87

3 posted 2010-04-23 04:53 PM


And I hope it was worth
your dignity and pride,
I'll be leaving
and I’m taking them with me.

BINGO!!!!!

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