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Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
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Louisiana

0 posted 2010-04-19 11:07 AM


Many pieces of my fractured self
Lie like leaves upon the ground
And though I place my dreams on the shelf
My hopes still keep hanging around
It feels too real to realize
That life has passed before my eyes

The stifling, remorseless grip of life
And the timeless mental test
Only the sky which has no height
Or what used to be my best
It took a lifetime of resistance to see
My best, again, will never be

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deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
1 posted 2010-04-19 12:35 PM


This is a griping, emotion filled write, which you have written in good style and expressed yourself well!
   BRAVO!!!

    David

I thank the LORD everyday
He has given me something to say
And to share with others,
My Friends, my sisters, my brothers!

To God Be the Glory!

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

2 posted 2010-04-20 11:47 AM


a poignant, emotive write...nicely done
Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
3 posted 2010-04-20 08:12 PM



wow, very powerful and poignant. You keep getting better and better and I'll say it again: This is one of your best!

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