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Kahlil
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0 posted 2010-04-13 10:02 PM




moon water
my cup not empty, but new
awaits
the tiptoe night
to skim my shores with a whisper

my eyes close, breathless
wisdom of stillness
speaks to my heart
with love
what I already know

gently, constraints
fall away, off guard
slide softly, released
like ribbons
to drift with the darkening sky

fill my cup anew
with light, with love, to drink
the moon water
of dreams


[This message has been edited by Kahlil (04-14-2010 12:35 AM).]

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Kethry D
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1 posted 2010-04-13 11:09 PM


This is pretty with good imagery.
steavenr
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2 posted 2010-04-14 12:12 PM


this line was outstanding:

"my cup not empty, but new"

...you tied it in so well to an excellent ending...a good, slow read (the kind you savor)

Kahlil
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3 posted 2010-04-15 09:10 AM


Thank you Kethry and Steavenr for stopping by
for a sip of moon water!

Sunshine
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4 posted 2010-04-15 08:48 PM


Stevenr took my first lines...

but when I read it again, I find I like these...

gently, constraints
fall away, off guard
slide softly, released
like ribbons
to drift with the darkening sky

fill my cup anew
with light, with love, to drink
the moon water
of dreams


Thank you! It is so good to read you again! It's been a long, long time.




Margherita
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5 posted 2010-04-18 10:18 AM


quote:
fill my cup anew
with light, with love, to drink
the moon water
of dreams



So beautiful! Good to read you again indeed!

Love,
Margherita

Kahlil
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6 posted 2010-04-18 10:59 AM


Sunshine & Margherita, thank you!
Lamar Cole
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7 posted 2010-04-21 11:59 PM


Very inspiring poem.
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