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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
up another size I’ve learned that life goes on and lies up another size I’ve learned that no one really tries up another size I’ve learned that few are very wise up another size I’ve learned that all the grays are skies up another size I’ve learned I need to dietize and shrink the negativity that comes with my humanity |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
simple yet sweet. I like it. Jill |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Positively stated The poem is rated By this one in remiss Who's ignorance is bliss "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Very well expressed in a succinct style....I like the use of metaphor and comparisons between weight/humanity.... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello steavenr, I would have been sad to ignore your so wise poem...Thbese are great lines that reflect with accuracy and perfection lot of human thinkings...The poems works artfully and give clear clues to considerations we all have I guess..It was a very enjoyable read and a moment of deep thinking... have a nice day yann |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I would have to agree with Honeybee. Her comments summed up this poem completely. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, That's too bad. I'm sorry to hear that. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Jill, thank you for your kind comments...glad you liked it Andrew, thanks, man...always a poet I see Honeybee, I appreciate your pithy and welcome opinions yann, Thank you. Yours words are most welcome and appreciated. Earl, Thanks for stopping by and reading and leaving a reply (all the way from Osaka) Bobby, huhhhh? not sure I understood your take...hey, but thanks  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, Perhaps I misunderstood what you were saying. To me, it sounded like you were gaining weight and growing out of your clothes. Skinny Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (04-16-2010 12:19 PM).] |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Bobby, the write is simply a metaphor for how the gaining of personal knowledge (if any clothing is involved) seems to always increase one's hat size and thus causes a look at others in a negative light. We seem to see others in a less than caring manner by looking down at them...as far as clothing and weight gain...I have already taken care of that in very physical way... |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
a profound and thought-provoking poem...very well expressed! faith There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Very clever poem, enjoyed. Kat >^..^< |
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