»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #46
»
Now, Who's The Fool? (an ode to cupid)
| Open Poetry #46 |
|
Now, Who's The Fool? (an ode to cupid) |
|
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
|
Now, Who's The Fool?  Oh Cupid cruel, I was your fool so long exploited as your tool you were the needle through the eye the spider’s web I used to lie. ~ You gave me sense of Eden’s loss the apple turned to applesauce I felt your breeze that strokes believe that made me dance the dance naïve; Your schemes, your wiles within my ask did hide behind a phantoms mask assured me nectar with its charm and lured me on with false alarm. ~ Oh Cupid sly, you chained my heart you led me on right from the start for amusement and your laughter as you dangled everafter before my easy eager face within your empty armed embrace that hovered over all my bare and bickered me with tricks ensnare. ~ I'm tired of kissing frogs in vain who tantalize within your reign you deepen woe, you dull the sun you imp, you cad, you sneaky one! You slight the love and feign the lust to pierce my skin with arrow's thrust and no man seems to measure up and disappointment fills my cup. ~ And only time does hold my hand and offers me no wedding band I find the road a lonely one where all is tried and all is done while I, in hopeless nightly cry shall sleep within my bed of why? ~ I look into the mirrors true and all your lies come into view the sham you bring is unrefined there is no love that I can find. You take my breath and faith to keep and drown my dreams with wash of weep yes I was daft and now I wake a victim, wise to your mistake; It shows me this in every way how blind I was but yesterday. ~ Still you assume I'm not astute to realize you're not so cute I plead my case to God above He fills my heart with all His love I need you not, I trust Him more you scallywag! Go find the door! Although I wail, and though I sigh I bid you gone! This is goodbye! ~ It's time to take your final bow the jokes on you! I've got you now! In fate's defeat where you belong you think me weak, yet I am strong! I'll trust the Lord, you wait and see He'll give me wings and set me free He'll give me love, the meaning of the goal, the prince of Eden's love... One soul, one mind, two hearts entwined His Epopee of love combined. By Melissa Long-Monette [This message has been edited by Honeybee (04-13-2010 09:19 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2010 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
WOW! A true poet you are. No words can I say in praise that would not diminish what has been offered here. I bow to you and yours in true admiration. May I also say, your choice of art is perfect. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
....and now it's my turn to say WOW to you Andrew! Thank you so much for your wonderful reply!  About the picture, it's one of my favourite paintings by William Adolphe Bougereau. Most poets probably write the poem and then find a picture to match BUT I found the painting and wrote the poem to suit it. This is also a major revision of an oldie I penned many years ago, the original poem was pure crap! LOL I decided to re-write this oldie because after being in a long-term relationship, it's over now and this poem gives me hope and keeps me positive trusting that God will bring me my true love. |
||
|
Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well, kudos to you on the rewrite. Just remember, we are our own worst critic. And, yes, sometimes we're the only one willing to admit that it is a piece of crap. Sorry about the relationship... but we all walk that path a time or two. I think it helps us to know when the real thing comes along. Glad you're not ready to give up the search. One side note: Both my parents come from Ontario, Canada. My grandmother lives literally a stone's throw from the Ambassador Bridge. When we talk about going back home, it's to Grandma's house we go. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well thanks again Andrew! And shall I call you my honourary half-Canadian now?  |
||
|
Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very well done, Honeybee. Ida |
||
|
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
||
|
LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Oh, Melissa. Look what you have done! Your poem is absolutely fine. The flow and rhymes. The rhymes! I pray you will not think less of me if I borrow some of those word combinations. This poem is just fantastic. |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ida, JamesMichael and Michael~ Thank you for your replies, it always means a lot to me And Michael, I would never think less of you, in fact, I'd be honoured! Thanks for the high compliment! and *ahem* I did think of you and Balladeer when I added 'you scallywag!' to my poem LOL  |
||
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is perfect. You say what I feel so very well. Sandra |
||
|
martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
wow you pretty much summed it all up in one poem, i couldnt share your thoughts or feelings more. keep the faith, im right there with ya |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The kudos fit the poem...and the poet. I'm still chuckling over applesauce, though; perhaps it should have come toward the end. LOL... LJA is right...there are some great combos on wording... and...email me when you can? Hugs  |
||
|
Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I enjoyed reading this down to the last line. You are a wonderful poet. This is fantastic. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
