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Zeigeist
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since 2009-12-09
Posts 311
Michigan

0 posted 2010-04-11 08:55 AM


soldier blue

blue depths,
love and pain share the water.
blood red, dark, slow memories,
edges with contempt for the present.

grey weight,
oppressive, foreboding sky.
filtered haze of life
chains of iron.

brilliant, flashing
slide shows of horror.
alone, torn,
innocent limbs of lives.

dull, dim, eyes
brown bottle bottoms.
painful trigger fingers, dog tags.
tears on polished
drunken bar.

part of the "war series"

Zeitgeist

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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2010-04-11 09:22 AM


Love is a battlefield?
Y'know, sometimes it's a good idea to rip off something white and just wave like we mean it!  

You write these purges very well...there's more to it than this though, and you express that also very well.

Great metaphor here!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
2 posted 2010-04-11 02:08 PM


This kind of human suffering is heartbreaking, Z. You write it so well.
                                Ida

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2010-04-11 09:42 PM


Fine writing...James
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

4 posted 2010-04-13 08:36 PM


I am surprised this one does not have more comments...so well written...my favorite descriptive line is:

"brilliant, flashing
slide shows of horror"

...so cool on so many levels

Zeigeist
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since 2009-12-09
Posts 311
Michigan
5 posted 2010-04-14 03:47 PM


Thank you all for your kind replies. Conflict of the heart or on the battle front fighting for our country, does it's damage to us all. A person's perception of reality can truely be bruised and only the right understanding and kindness even begins to set the wound. Again thanks for reading.

Zeitgeist.

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