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Zeigeist
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since 2009-12-09
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0 posted 2010-04-09 11:08 PM



Torn

Given back my heart
like damaged goods,
worn and soiled at the party,
then torn on the way home.
Slept in and finally left on the floor.

The price tag lies in the dust
under the stove.

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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
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1 posted 2010-04-09 11:28 PM


Quite a good portrait of the experience written here.  

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
2 posted 2010-04-10 04:57 AM


Maybe you could get a refund?
Zeigeist
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3 posted 2010-04-10 08:30 AM


Thank you Kathy,

Z.

Zeigeist
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4 posted 2010-04-10 08:31 AM


Lol, you make me smile RH. thanks for the reply

Z.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
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5 posted 2010-04-10 10:20 PM


Poignant write....if only you knew how I relate!  You expressed it so powerfully.
LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
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6 posted 2010-04-10 10:47 PM



Not a very happy memory to keep Zeigheist

Banish it and hope for better luck next time
Take care my friend.

Lindsay

Zeigeist
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7 posted 2010-04-10 11:17 PM


thank you Honeybee for your kind words.

Z.

Zeigeist
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8 posted 2010-04-10 11:18 PM


Thank you Lindsay for your reply and good advice, however if I banished all my bad memories, my poetry would dry up for sure lol.

Z.

Earl Brinkman
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9 posted 2010-04-20 10:41 PM


A well written poem with an ending that stings.
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