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While Away the Hours
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While Away the Hours |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Death’s shadow creeps into the room Through doors hinged by time’s decay It creaks as if to signal gloom And drive her mem’ries soft away We’ll meet on shores of sweet delight Perhaps my ticket travels first While day slips silently into night And blessedness sips sounds uncursed While away the hours of dust-strewn memories That shadow melancholy in shades of grief While away the hours of wonderings As life rests in the mistiness of relief So cherish slow the glory of her passing Into pure life everlasting...Into pure life everlasting… |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Steaven, this is heartwrenchingly melancholic, but so beautifully written. So good to see you on Pip again! Love and peace. Margherita  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Echoing Margherita. An exquisite tribute and worthy of one so obviously worthy. Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Margherita and Owl, thank you so much for the kind comments...without being melodramatic, I have spent the last few months dancing with death...this one was for my mother who recently passed away...and yes, she was worthy...thank you both...thank you much |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This was a worthy tribute to your mother. I especially found the closing couplet moving. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Glad you are back Steven. This is such a touchung and beautiful poem. Ida |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Welcome back my friend, we've missed your well written poetry. This one is no exception. A delight to read Steave. Lindsay |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Earl, heartfelt thanks on your comments...the closing couplet was the heartest for me...and no, I did not misspell hardest...thank you, sir |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Ida, thank you so much for your generous words...they are more than appreciated... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Lindsay, you are much too kind...because of health problems I have not been able to read, much less write poetry...thank you for your warm reminder of just how much I have missed...of just how much it means...here's to hoping I can be around more...I really, really need to read some of the great work here again... |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, I like the last couplet. Sorry for your loss. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Bobby, thank you for your kind words...glad you liked the last two lines...I changed that several times...something I do not like to do, finally deciding to just to do a repeat... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Came in to read this again. My condolences for your mother's passing. Thank you for loving your mother. I also especially loved the closing couplet. Owl |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"So cherish slow the glory of her passing Into pure life everlasting...Into pure life everlasting" ______________________________________________ This is a beautifully painful tribute to read, I am truly sorry for your loss. The repetition of "into pure life everlasting" is very effective and moving. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Owl, It is a compliment just to have you stop again to read...and your condolences are deeply appreciated...thank you |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Honeybee, thank you for your kind words...I am so pleased that the ending 'worked' and created the emotions you described...thank you and I do appreciate your words... |
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