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passing shadows
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0 posted 2010-03-26 12:56 PM



My life is cooking and laundry
and cleaning and sex,
I want to leave to where
it's not so complex.

Pack your bags and leave for a week
till I can get a ticket out
I've seen and I've had it now
of knowing what married life is about.

I'm getting on a bus out of town
down
to the beach where I'm from

gone like the wind

and a year numb.

Pops said he'd give me money
to get away from you

he'd even give me his dog.....
and I cried tears true.

You're a loser.
And I'm gone.
Drunk whatever.
I don't care come dawn.

I'll be on a bus back home
where I belong.

© Copyright 2010 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
1 posted 2010-03-26 12:59 PM


Do what's good for you.

This is a good poem, but I almost felt like I shouldn't have been reading it.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2010-03-26 01:03 PM


No Paul, my life is an open book, and you are very welcome to read it.



Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
3 posted 2010-03-28 05:54 PM


.

"My life is cooking and laundry
and cleaning and sex,
I want to leave to where
it's not so complex."


We must take it then
that you want to get back
to that simpler time when
the good things in life
could be had in exchange
for cooking and laundry
and cleaning.

How Marie Antoinette . . .


.

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
4 posted 2010-03-28 09:35 PM



I'm very pleased to hear that you are heading home again dear Dixie. Dear old Dad

will come to the rescue,  all the very best in a new start. Good luck.

Lindsay

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
5 posted 2010-03-28 10:00 PM


ya mean all I have to do is cook Lorelei a TV dinner while the clothes are in the washing machine and I get paid sex?  hmmm, I wonder if I can ask her for an "advance".  

Hi ya Dixie.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
6 posted 2010-03-29 02:22 PM


Hello Dixie,do what you have to do, forget the wrong man and go home to make yourself totally new...I loved the poem, kind of things that happen so often...


regards

yann

Zeigeist
Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311
Michigan
7 posted 2010-03-29 06:37 PM


The danger in writing very intense, personel poetery is making it to much like a diary entry. It will be very intense but not very "poetic". I think you have just the right balance with this one. It is poetic enough to be enjoyed but intense enough to grab us with it's transparence. Nice work

Zeitgeist.

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
8 posted 2010-03-29 08:32 PM


.


"I've seen and I've had it now
of knowing what married life is about."


Hell on Earth.

Be the hero
and pass the word . . .

.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
9 posted 2010-03-30 05:07 PM


The 'common thread' through most of these 'writes' seems to be about
marriage as an attempted escape from facing one's own demons
[unfortunately, every form of refuge has its price]


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