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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2010-03-20 05:59 PM



Your World In Your Eyes

Girl it's six in the morning, daybreak dawning
and deep down but not destroyed
I'm a shadow of a love you knew
inside a ring of fire and youth
on a river of dreams passin through.

Goodnight Mr. Moon
Somewhere I used to be
I see you smilin at me.
Good morning Mr. day
I know it's time again
To be on my way.
With your world in your eyes
I just can't stay.

Girl it's about where we've been, talkin chin to chin
and all the things that matter
are in the love and truth we knew
inside a ring of fire and youth
on a river of dreams passin through.

Goodnight Mr. Love
Somewhere I used to be
Keeps you inside of me.
Good morning Mr. Day
I know it's time again
To be on my way
With your world in your eyes  
I just can't stay.

With your world in your eyes
You know I can't stay!



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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 posted 2010-03-20 07:12 PM


Yo Eric,

This works very nice.  It's good to see your poems again.

Bobby

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2010-03-21 04:06 PM


Dear Eric, it's so nice to see you  back on Pip and with such a captivating love song. Beautiful poetic expressions, with a melancholic hue.

Love,
Margherita

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2010-03-21 09:24 PM


enjoyed this my friend, especially the first stanza...

j.

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since 1999-07-29
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4 posted 2010-03-22 05:55 PM


Bittersweet and beautiful!!!
faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
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Poe Haven, USA
5 posted 2011-01-05 10:29 PM


very profound and beautifully written...great work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2011-01-10 06:37 PM


Thanks all for the kind comments.

Eric

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